User talk:Jillianmm31/Domestic violence in the United States/Samthebossbabe Peer Review

Jillian,

I agree with you about the global section. Rather than taking it completely out, perhaps including a comparative analysis? To show the prevalence of domestic violence in the United States vs other countries? Doesn't have to be extensive, could be a different map than what is provided?

Have you thought about adjusting the lead into the article? The wording could stronger and clearer. It's a little choppy. For example, the first sentence reads "Domestic violence in the United States"... I would recommend taking out United States, because the definition of domestic violence doesn't change based on location.

A few other easy things to fix could be to go through and update sentence structuring to allow the article to flow. There is some choppiness and unnecessary repetition.

Overall, you have your points you want to address. I think the information you want to provide, the statistical updates, and reference updates will be great additions to this article.