User talk:Jingwennn/sandbox

Mel's peer review
This looks awesome so far!!! You have a lot of excellent citations throughout your writing which is great. By the work you have described, Sarah Dyer's work has been accurately represented, likely much more than ever prior on Wikipedia! Because she is listed as a comic artist first, you could possibly put her "Graphic Novels" section above her zines section. Aside from this, the order seems good. I would say something you could add(an easy edit) would be linking some of the words to other Wikipedia pages. Also, you could change some of the writing, particularly within the "Story with Girl Zines" section, to a more factual tone; right now, to me, it reads like you are inserting your opinion slightly. There seems to be sentences leaning toward opinion statements throughout your article so I would suggest looking it over specifically keeping that in mind. One example I see in the "DIY Philosophy" section is where you talk about women being independent and speaking for themselves. Also, if there is a way you can add content to the "Award" section, possibly by adding other relating topics to the section, that would be probably look good for the page. Maybe change the title to something that encompasses multiple forms of accolades and include what other people have said about her. This section is a great idea though!!! Again, awesome use of sources! You have a lot of useful references.Partridges (talk) 14:52, 21 November 2017 (UTC)