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=Rouen Evaluations=

4/24/2019 Peer Review from Jacob Peebles (Rouen)
Points: 44.5/40

Grade: 111%

Spelling/Grammar Exceeds standard. No errors

Language exceeds standard. No bias, very professional.

Organization exceeds standard. Great lead, it had me hooked from the start.

Coding Exceeds standard. Perfect

Validity meets standard. This paragraph looks almost perfect to me. I could not find anything wrong with it. One possible suggestion (you don't need to but its just an idea) would be to add more information on the direct effects the city of Rouen faced after these bombings. The paragraph seems to focus a lot of the American side of the story.

Completion Exceeds standard. Great.

Relevance Exceeds standard. Very relevant and very interesting material to the common reader.

Sources Exceeds standard. Credible.

Citations Exceeds standard. Yes

References Exceeds standard. Yes

Nice work! I look forward to seeing more edits from you in the future.

Jake.peebles (talk) 20:31, 24 April 2019 (UTC) Jacob Peebles

Peer review from Jacob Peebles Jjher7030 (talk) 04:40, 25 April 2019 (UTC)

5/7/2019 Evaluation by DrMichaelWright
DrMichaelWright (talk) 13:05, 7 May 2019 (UTC)


 * Points: 40/40
 * Grade: 100%

Spelling/Grammar
Meets standard.

Language
Nearly meets standard.
 * The paragraph reads like a really good story. Unfortunately, it does not read like an encyclopedia.
 * 'Derived' is a great word, but I think 'connected to' fits better than 'derived from' in this context.
 * It would create clarity, I think, to mention that Sotteville is just across the river from Rouen. "Connecting suburb" suggests that it's not that close, since 'connecting' could be read in the context of the trains rather than as a synonym for 'adjacent suburb'.

Organization
Meets standard.

Coding
Meets standard.

Validity
Meets standard.

Completion
Exceeds standard. You've really gone all out for this. It's pretty superb (for another page, see below).

Relevance
Meets standard. Once reformatted and cut down to be more encyclopedic, I think your work, and especially your citations, would be a great addition to the History of Rouen page. You could, however, usefully add a sentence with a citation or two to the Rouen main page.

6/5/2019 Evaluation by DrMichaelWright
DrMichaelWright (talk) 18:17, 5 June 2019 (UTC)
 * Points: 40/40
 * Grade: 100%

Spelling/Grammar
Meets standard.
 * "...the city’s corporations, such as the shoemakers and the goldsmiths." Shoemakers and goldsmiths do not sound like 'corporations' A corporation is generally a legally-incorporated organization of a group of people, not individual artisans.
 * "...the 1780’s was rooted..." no apostrophe, since it's plural, not possessive.

Language
Meets standard.

Organization
Nearly meets standard.
 * The paragraphs do not seem to follow a chronological timeline, which makes this history piece difficult to follow.
 * With this sheer volume of material, some subheaders of before, during, and after the Revolution would be in order.

Coding
Meets standard.
 * "...rivalry between regional parlements and the French monarchy." I think you meant this link: parlements.

Validity
Meets standard.
 * "Following the Revolution...the Constituent Assembly set up the Comité de Mendicité in 1790 which would..." The Revolution is typically dated 1789-1799. Therefore, 1790 would not be 'following the Revolution'. This is confusing while trying to follow the timeline of your paragraphs.

Completion
Exceeds standard. Wow - above and beyond!

Relevance
Meets standard. This is very in-depth for a general article on Bordeaux. It would probably fit better on a History of Bordeaux article, which has yet to be started. (A timeline article is not the same.)

6/15/2019 Evaluation by DrMichaelWright
DrMichaelWright (talk) 11:54, 15 June 2019 (UTC)

This is great work, and I hope you will do something with it. However, I think it's too much for the Nantes article. You could create a new article from this, with a single-paragraph extract on the Nantes page proper. That single paragraph could have its own sub-header at a level below that of Modern era on the Nantes page, and a template link right under that header and above the paragraph.
 * Points: 40.5/40
 * Grade: 101.25%

Spelling/Grammar
Meets standard.
 * "...captive Africans that..." I think 'who' would be better. Also put a comma after Africans.

Language
Nearly Meets standard.
 * The language is really nice, bit this text reads more like a paper than an encyclopedia entry, which is supposed to be more concise.
 * "Nantes is also responsible for the transportation..." 'Responsible' is an awkward term to use, especially in this context.
 * "Exported commodities included sugar, cotton,..." It sounds like you mean 'imported', or you could specify by referring to them as being processed in Nantes, with the sugar and cotton having been grown elsewhere.

Organization
Meets standard.

Coding
Meets standard.

Validity
Meets standard.

Completion
Meets standard.
 * In some sense, this is really too complete. This amount of text could be the start of a new article, or part of a 'history of Nantes', once such an article would be written.

Relevance
Meets standard.
 * As above, much of this stuff is more relevant for a separate article, than for a general page on Nantes.