User talk:Jlmohn/sandbox

Peer Review (3/8/19) by Emily Miner My first impressions for editing the Berbers and Islam article is that it needs some additional citations. The article has warning labels for the writer potentially conducting their own research. The overall article only has two sources in total, which is not very good for the article itself. The warning also says that the article may need to be rewritten in order to provide correct and cited information. I would strongly consider starting from scratch with this article. I would break up the topic into more sections and then add any information to those sections from any sources you may find. The article has a lot of links to outside pages, so I would look at those pages and reference lists in order to gain more sources. As well, I would remove any information that cannot be cited after your research, in order to avoid plagiarism.

I see from your sandbox that you plan on adding information about the modern relationship between Islam and Berbers, which would be a great additional section. I also see that you are planning on adding more sources to avoid plagiarism, which is exactly what I would suggest. I like that you are planning on adding more sections about different geographic areas. This was my initial reaction to the article as well. Breaking up the information makes the page easier to understand and gives the article more organization. I don't see the actual edits you plan on making but it sounds like you have a good plan! Good luck with your research!

Emmyminer (talk) 17:21, 8 March 2019 (UTC)

Peer editing
My first comment is that your suggested edits are exactly what I would say is the most important change to be made. The fact that the only citations are a self-published book and Encyclopedia Britannica is worrisome.

First, I would definitely try to add some citations. I think splitting the "background" section up somehow would be really helpful, since it presents as just a block of text without citations. That section could have the headline "History" (you do not need the repetition of the article title in this section title) and then instead of "background" as the title, sections could be more specific, like "Islamic Defeat of the Berbers" and then another something along the lines of "Assimilation to Islam" or "Berbers in the Ummayad Dynasty." That should break the section up and make it more legible and accurate. Finally, I would follow through on creating new sections. The fact that this article ends in the year 1000 is definitely an issue. I know you have already done a project on the Berbers today, so maybe see if you can go back and find those sources through Moodle to use. You could also go to some of the linked articles at the bottom of the page and look at the sources they use, like the "Berber Spring" page or "Berberism." Those should have some more recent information in them which may include information about Islam. As long as you include something, it will make a big difference. I do not think you need to have a full ten pages there, but at least a few sentences which elaborate that the Berbers still exist and have spread across the Middle East/North Africa Region and into Europe.

Aurgallagher (talk) 16:16, 15 March 2019 (UTC)