User talk:Jmatou/sandbox

Peer review- Betheyr for Jmatou
I think that the article is going in a good way, but it just needs more information. I would start by creating different sections so that the article can be broken up into headers that will make it easier to read. I would break up the lead into sections or just make new sections and then add the information from the lead in there. I would add more sources if possible because there are some claims that do not have sources at all. Example, "She was the head human-computer for Lowell in 1915. Her calculations led to predictions for the location of the unknown planet, but Lowell died in 1916 meaning that the project was discontinued. In the late 1920s, the project was resumed and Clyde Tombaugh was hired to lead it.". I feel like this is okay if they all use the same source, but I think there could be more sources throughout. The voice so far sounds good, meaning, it is neutral and does not seem to have a bias any which way. Here is a link to the peer review template. Betheyr (talk)