User talk:Jmg370/sandbox

For minor edits:

https://docs.google.com/a/georgetown.edu/document/d/1dpnXYaSaObVCyIAnmD8t8GbGZzBKQpxUvkCGNYsEjbM/edit?usp=sharing

Overall, I liked your work a lot! I know there are a lot of comments in the document but they are largely about things that are pretty minor and easy to fix. You currently only have 2 source cited, but I can tell from your work that you've used more sources and I assume you'll cite those before the article is final (I'm mostly referring to the censorship case section). Also, as I told Jennie, it's important to use signal phrases whenever possible, especially with Wikipedia articles where it is important to show that there is no original research. I also mentioned in the document that you might want a pro-Censorship source or argument in your article, just to balance the coverage and keep the article as neutral as possible.

Other than that, I thought your work was very well done. Good work!

Jrr108 (talk) 21:21, 28 November 2016 (UTC)

Jesse,

I’ve made some minor edits in the censorship section, but my main suggestion is to explain the ultimate result of the case if that information is available. Also, just add your citation information to the paragraph. In the critical reception section I would suggest adding some more information explaining the sources of some of the quotes and criticism you mentioned so your article can appear more neutral. Overall, I really like the additions you have contributed to the article! https://docs.google.com/document/d/1f6uEYbw_3jWgDjXYakhhzfsLisDc02y2xN_ZMXVkMHE/edit Jm3038 (talk) 00:42, 29 November 2016 (UTC)