User talk:Jmg613/sandbox

Types: is there further expansion after the sentence intended to be added? If not, consider briefely expanding upon the sentence

Wild animals section is good

Oral rabies vaccination programs: The first couple of sentences sound more like it belongs in a history or background section. If there is more background on ORV, and possibly other means of rabies vaccination, consider making a history section. The second paragraph in this section could be its own section, titled something similar to “ORV in the United States”. Then, if there is further data on rabies vaccinations in different countries, those could be included as well in order to add to what is going on within this topic in other parts of the world.

If the wild animals section being too long is a concern, there is definitely opportunity to break the ORV section down into multiple sections. These could include background, History, ORV in the United States, ORV in other countries, cost for treatment, etc.

Overall, the sentence structure is very good. The sentences are efficient and to-the-point, they don’t waste any words or space. I’m not sure how much there is on the internet about rabies vaccination, but maybe use a couple more sources, if available.

Engw3307p2 (talk) 17:31, 18 November 2019 (UTC)Robine Arami