User talk:Jmichicich/sandbox

Peer Review of Native American Health Center Page
The edits made to the page are useful and thought through. The Clientele section added provides useful information that the article was lacking previously. I like that it gives the statistics on the demographics the center is serving. Maybe an example of the events and services offered specifically for Natives that you mention would be a helpful thing to include? I also do wonder if "patient" would describe the people NAHC is serving better that "client". The edits seem neutral and balanced, and the sources used seem reliable to me. I noticed that it seems like the History section, which was already there, could use some edits. It doesn't flow very well, some parts would benefit from more citations and it could be more clear and concise (in it's start and end maybe) in the way all the history connects with the NAHC. The first sentence of that section, for instance, is not very strong feeling and could use a citation maybe. So that could be a good place to make some more changes to the page. I also like where it's going with the new section titles that are being added. Amoiseyeva (talk) 01:28, 13 October 2018 (UTC)