User talk:Joabeper/sandbox

Joabeper I see you've assigned yourself 3 articles on the Wiki dashboard, which is awesome. Remember, you only have to do one, so you can remove two OR you can be super ambitious and improve three articles! :) However, you're overdue on ALL four exercises so make sure you do those ASAP, as you're supposed to have started drafting in the sandbox this week. Please contact me if you have any questions whatsoever! Gardneca (talk) 01:40, 29 March 2019 (UTC)

Marsha's Peer Review
Overall great job! The tone of your writing stays pretty neutral throughout. Since Polynesian mythology has a lot of ancestry and lineage involved I think having one section that bullet points each relative and how they are related (husband, father,mother etc.)would be helpful and easier to see who is who.I noticed you added that she is the second child, maybe find out who her other siblings were and if they have any myths involving Hine-nui-te-po.

I like how you used the reading from class, but fix the link so that it directs you to the actual source and not to Laulima. However, in Maui's encounter did he have to enter through her vagina or is that just something he tried? Consider changing "must" to "tried" or "attempted" in that sentence. Your other two links work perfectly fine and are great sources. I think having at least one source soley on Hine-nui-te-po or a large section dedicated to her would be really great.

Marshaho808 (talk) 09:16, 15 April 2019 (UTC)


 * Thanks Marshaho808 for your great suggestions for improvement. Joabeper I think the wording changes you've done so far have been really good, but you're going to really want to find some additional citations as you continue to improve the article over the next few weeks. Notice that there are warning banners on the top of this page, noting that this page reads more like a story than an encyclopedia entry, so your next task is to find scholarship on Hine-nui-te-po in addition to her stories. Remember, you're in the best place in the world to find library resources on Hawaiian topics, so go over to Hamilton and see if the librarians can help you find some great sources. This is a great start, keep up the hard work! Gardneca (talk) 18:15, 18 April 2019 (UTC)
 * Joabeper one additional point, have you seen that the talk page has a recent post? You should respond to it! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Gardneca (talk • contribs) 18:18, 18 April 2019 (UTC)