User talk:Joamst16/sandbox

Welcome to class, JO!--Jbdolphin (talk) 01:11, 28 January 2021 (UTC)

Peer Review
Hi, I like what you added to the article but I think it could be strengthened a bit. Maybe you could include specific accounts of victimization as well as specific teens from the LGBTQ+ community who have self-harmed or committed suicide. I think its more impactful if people have a face to attach to the tragedy. Like maybe accounts from news articles?

COMMENTS
Nice draft, Joamst16. The biggest challenges in drafting an encyclopedia entry are to keep it concise, neutral, and fully documented. Due to confirmation bias, we tend to assume that claims that we already agree with in the research we have done do not call for evidence. But for people who are skeptical or who have a very different world view, they do. Lines such as "In the LGBTQ+ community victimization is a huge issue" might be challenged in two ways: 1) what constitutes a "huge issue"--that's pretty vague language, and 2) what evidence do we have? Work for greater precision of language and meaning. Encyclopedic entries ideally use the absolute fewest words possible to offer the most neutral and evidenced material on a topic. See how much you can edit out and not lose meaning. --Jbdolphin (talk) 23:18, 28 April 2021 (UTC)