User talk:Joanna Naomi/sandbox

Laura's peer review
- Good, concise lead section, good intro to the topic

- Good overview of how sound is produced. Article is clear, structured, and easy to follow.

- I think more information/elaboration on the purpose of sound production would make the article feel more rounded/complete. Consider separating mechanisms of sound production from functions. For example, you mention that fish use acoustic communication in feeding, aggression, or courtship behaviour. More information on the function and use of sound production in these contexts would be helpful.

- When talking about sound production mechanisms, I would suggest thinking about trying to provide a general overview, in addition to the specific examples. E.g. Are the frequencies produced by the fish in your examples typical of stridulatory sound production?

- Also, you say “The H. flavolineatum does not make sounds louder than 1000 Hz, and do not respond to sounds louder than 1050 Hz”. Note that frequency (Hz) is a measure of pitch, not loudness

- Overall, good article. It seems to be neutral, unbiased, and cites reputable sources. Well-written.

Peer Review
Hi Joanna, great article! Well-written with only a couple of minor errors.

The lead section is a little confusing for me. The first paragraph gives a good description of your topic, but I'm not sure what your intentions are with the copy and pasted section from the "fish" article. I don't think that this is needed in your lead section, and simply linking to this fish article will suffice.

I like how you broke down the body of the article into small sections, it makes for easy reading. There is room for elaboration on the purpose of acoustic communications, however I believe your sub sections on both the mechanisms used were well done.

There were just a couple of minor grammatical errors I spotted.

"The grunts produced by this species of fishes, generate a frequency of approximately 700 Hz, and last approximately 47 milliseconds."- I believe the commas are unnecessary and interrupt the flow of this sentence.

"The H. flavolineatum does not make sounds frequencies greater than 1000 Hz, and do not respond to sounds with frequencies greater than 1050 Hz."- consider changing this to "H. flavolineatum does not make sounds of frequencies greater than 1000 Hz...".

"The fish species Opsanus tao, commonly known as "oyster toadfish", produce loud ‘grunting’ sounds by contracting muscles located along the sides of their swim bladder, known as sonic muscles"- The period is missing at the end of this sentence.

Aside from these minor errors, I found the article to be unbiased and neutral. The references used are also unbiased and are reliable journal articles. However, I am noticing that "Check |doi= value (help)." is showing up at the end of most of the references. I'm not quite sure how to fix this problem, but if you click the help button I'm sure it will lead you to the solution.

Overall I thought this was a great article that will make a significant contribution to Wikipedia!

Kyradsimms (talk) 20:13, 18 March 2018 (UTC)