User talk:Joarfr/sandbox

I see no work. You have to get going--RJBazell (talk) 17:00, 25 October 2018 (UTC)

Mari's peer review
Hello, Some things I think you did well on your article: -Good selection of headings. The topics you chose are important to understanding how HIV/AIDS is in Honduras -Good variation of information. I like that you included some social and political responses to HIV/AIDS in Honduras and didn't make it strictly about statistics or science. Some things I think you can improve: -Some of the citations are strange. You don't need to put names or sources in parentheses like we usually do in essays, it might be easier to just hit the 'cite' button and get the little hyper text number that links the source in references. -Some of the languages in the 'Among the garifunas' section does not sound neutral. Keep up the great work" --Maca1093 (talk) 20:58, 26 October 2018 (UTC)Marimar

Yunji's Peer Review
I really liked this article as a whole. You made a lot of changes compared to the original article which is really good. All your headings and sections are super clear which makes it really easy to read. It seems like there are two sections at the bottom that have not been completed yet. I feel like access to ARV treatment could be implemented into another section and doesn't need to be a section of its own. However, that is just a suggestion because it seemed a bit repetitive and could fit in another heading. Also, I would work on the introduction so that it embodies the stuff that you are about to say. Overall, good job! --Yjjong (talk) 01:26, 29 October 2018 (UTC)--Yjjong (talk) 01:26, 29 October 2018 (UTC)