User talk:Jodijansen/sandbox

Jodi, You’re off to a terrific start with your entry’s draft in the sandbox. You have both started mapping key content on your topic and also are clearly a quick study when it comes to mastering new tools and contexts. Your draft already has the look and organization of a Wikipedia entry, and I think the opening few sentences work well as an overview.

•	As you revise, here are a few details to consider: sentence fragment in “The charter can be …” •	The Purpose and Content and Style sections are nice and clear, but clarify the antecedent for “Aside from this,”

•	Sources: See if you can get this book from PSU’s Interlibrary Loan https://www.bl.uk/shop/anglo-saxon-kingdoms-hardback/p-2433 (there is one copy in Summit and it is checked out) if it comes in time it might have some useful material •	Your sources are a little tilted to general textbooks w both Nees and Zarnecki appearing, but the most problematic sources are the blog and the book from 1860.

The image you have included enhances the entry, and you’ve also been adept at linking to other entries, well done! AMcClanan (talk) 18:45, 26 November 2018 (UTC)


 * Thank you for the feedback. I will review the sections you mentioned above. I will try to find the book you've suggested where I am, but unfortunately the last book I requested from the PSU's Interlibrary Loan took several weeks to arrive. It is a book specific to Anglo-Saxon Charters and particularly focuses on New Minster, so I hope to find some useful information in it over the next few days.

Jodijansen (talk) 03:31, 27 November 2018 (UTC)Jodijansen

Okay, fingers crossed! If the UW book gets returned,hopefully you can snag it that way. It sounds like the other book you requested though is even more on target. AMcClanan (talk) 19:43, 27 November 2018 (UTC)

Hi, Jodi! This is an excellent draft! I had to take some notes so I can go back to my own page and improve! I spent some time reading a rereading your entry - perhaps in the following passage: "The text is comprised of 22 short chapters which outline the creation and fall of both angels and man, and also presents Edgar’s desire to do the will of God", specifically "and also presents Edgar's desire to do the will of God" needs a either a reference or to be reworded? Maybe something like: "The text also may illustrate Edgar's desire to do the will of God". The reason for this edit is because it originally seems like a strong statement that would require evidence.

Jullian93 (talk) 23:27, 27 November 2018 (UTC)

Peer review: This is a terrific beginning to this article and you should be stoked with all the great info you have found thus far. I would agree with the professor in saying that the images you attached are very helpful to the overall understanding of this piece. Additionally the mention of the unique section titles Frontispiece. This is very unique to your specific structure and is a key mention when whiting about this in detail. — Preceding unsigned comment added by N0nlethal2 (talk • contribs) 17:19, 2 December 2018 (UTC)