User talk:John McGrath/sandbox

Are you drafting here or on another user page? Need sources. dddonald (talk) 14:08, 22 February 2018 (UTC) Just added more content this morning. User:John McGrath John McGrath (talk) 16:37, 22 February 2018 (UTC)

This is shaping up nicely! Writing needs a few tweaks. Break this into a couple of paragraphs. Mention the fact that the courthouse was there (circuit court until ?). Mead's Tavern is not "fully intact." Give accurate names for historic structures since they will be listed later in the article. Say something about FNL and plans for restoration. Good sources. Cite the NL Academy book as a source as well as the HSR. dddonald (talk) 15:02, 27 February 2018 (UTC)

Much improved! Clarify that last sentence. Who has commissioned the study? It looks like you're trying to link to Wikipedia pages that do not exist. Is there anything on the FNL website that you could cite here? dddonald (talk) 14:54, 6 March 2018 (UTC)

Maria's Peer Review
There is a good amount of information in this introduction. Some words or phrases such as colonial are a little overused and maybe finding a few synonyms would be helpful. Condensing the first paragraph a small amount would be useful especially since that is the first thing that people see.

Maria Long — Preceding unsigned comment added by MLong12 (talk • contribs) 17:12, 6 March 2018 (UTC)

Colleen's Peer Review
Could you change some the words to make the section easier to understand like two sentences have the phrase, "also the site"? Also maybe change the word colonial in the beginning of 2nd paragraph? Also a picture of a town sign would be good or maybe a photo that shows the town itself? Cboyd 4 (talk) 17:28, 6 March 2018 (UTC)