User talk:Johngarcia331521/sandbox

Lead
The lead provides a lot of context on the location/speakers/status of the language, but I think you could improve it by making it a little more concise—it’s probably not necessary to include the tributaries of the Marañón River, or that the first Europeans to make contact with Aguaruna’s language family travelled across the Andes.

Phonology
The phonology section is well-organized and informative. It might help to combine the two vowel charts, since the nasalized vowels are all present in the first chart. Also, because the quotes taken directly from the grammer don’t really fit the tone of the standard Wikipedia page and don’t flow very well, they could probably be paraphrased.

Morphology
In the table under the Derivational Affixes subsection, I don’t understand what the descriptions in the Semantics column mean—it might help to elaborate on the descriptions or write them in a way that’s easier to interpret. Under the Clitics section, I think your autocorrect might have changed “NP constituents” into “No Problem constituents”.

Syntax
The syntax section is informative, but is a bit short compared to the Phonology and Morphology sections—it could probably do with some expanding, maybe with some more SOV examples. Also, I think more head/complement pairs could be given before saying that Aguaruna is definitely head-final.

As a Whole
The article provides all of the necessary information to get a basic understanding of Aguaruna’s phonology, morphology, and syntax. The article could best be improved by cutting information that isn’t needed, expanding on some of the shorter sections, formatting the glosses in an easy-to-read way, and rewording the sentences so that it fits the professional tone of a typical Wikipedia page. Also, adding links to other Wikipedia pages would be helpful for readers that aren’t clear on some of the terminology used.

Lead
This section does a good job of establishing the basic facts one should know about the Aguaruna language. I thought you did an especially good job of discussing the genetic history of the Aguaruna language.There are two smalls things which I would suggest adding. I think the term calque is fairly specialized and should be linked to a definition. Also there are two sentences which don't appear to be grammatically correct. The first sentence of this section reads 'its tributaries which the important consist of Cenepa, Santiago, Nieva, and Chiriaco Rivers' I think you mean 'the tributaries which are the most important'. Likewise you write 'the grammar with which much of this page uses' when I think you mean 'the grammar which this page uses'.

Phonology
This section effectively describes the essential parts of Aguaruna phonology. Is there predictable stress in your language? Either way, I think it is worth mentioning the presence or absence of stress. I also think it is maybe worth mentioning consonant distribution in the syllable if your grammar mentions it. In the accent sub-category of this section I think you should have links for the terms 'culminate' and 'obligatory' as they are fairly complex in a linguistic context.

Morphology
This section does a good job of laying out the basic morphological rules and relationships which govern Aguaruna. It seems that it is quite complex in this respect and you do a good jab of conveying the important concepts in a clear way. There are a couple things I would add for this section. When you provide examples of both derivational and inflectional affixes, I think it would be beneficial to use the three line gloss method here. While you do provide explanations for how these phenomena work, I think it would be clearer if you provide concrete examples with the gloss method. As you noted, the clitics section is particularly short and would probably benefit from some additional information.

Syntax
I thought this section was generally excellent. You were very clear about both headedness and word order. The only thing I would suggest adding is perhaps some more specific examples of headedness as well as a perhaps some more general information concerning the nature of headedness of Aguaruna.

Final Thoughts
This page provides the necessary information about phonology, syntax, and morphology. It also does a good job of orienting the reader in respect to the wider context in which the Aguaruna language exists. In terms of things to change, I would certainly make sure you are using the three word gloss method especially in your morphological section as it can be slightly unclear. Another thing I would be ware of is linking. Your text uses some technical language which would likely be unfamiliar to some readers. I also think it could be beneficial to make sure you are providing fully fleshed out sections for each process you describe. It's also always worthwhile to proofread for grammatical errors. Isaactgisaactg (talk) 22:54, 13 April 2019 (UTC)