User talk:Johnmsommers/sandbox

Nicole's feedback and suggestions
I think your article is really well balanced with what you have so far. I'm assuming you'll add more of Pamela's publications later on. Some of the language you use is a little too casual and doesn't read quite like an encyclopedia. Also, proofread! I know you'll grammar check everything once it's more finished, but it's never too early to start. I'm also assuming the citation format will be Wikipedia style later on as well.

Also, make sure to refer to Pamela with her last name. The article is also missing her alma mater and seems to not have enough sources.

Otherwise, it looks good for a work in progress!

Becca's comments
You need to have her name as the ultimate header you need a little blurb about er after that you need an info box your citation format is not correct (that is why they aren't showing up in references) [see other bios if you aren't sure about the above]

early life & education refer to her as Templer (not Pamela) condense sentences 2 & 3 "teaching how to conduct" is that supposed to be "learning"? your citation format is not correct

career & research "honed her interests" sounds funny - suggested edit: Templer's ecosystem ecology research focuses on the influence of plant-microbial interactions on nutrient cycling (nitrogen and carbon).

please edit all of it, thinking about how i rewrote the first sentence. lots of great information just needs some wordsmithing and think about Nicole's comments - I 100% agree with her

remove "on top of her research" (being a professor includes doing research)

the awards and honors section can be bullet points the other parts of it can move to research publications -given that this info will always be changing i would list a few of her top cited publications (full bibliographic information) with corresponding citations and remove this

the public engagement piece is not about public engagement - move this to her career and research

remove other interest and/or personal life — Preceding unsigned comment added by Waterbarnes (talk • contribs) 22:58, 10 November 2018 (UTC)