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Peer Review:
The following will be an evaluation of the Lead Section written in this Sandbox for the article "Pemmican Proclamation." Basing this evaluation on the Peer Review Checklist, I have the following to say:

- All information provided is relevant to the subject at hand. This draft is, plainly and simply, a satisfactory on this front.

- This draft does not take any sides in the matter. Neither the Metis nor those who issued the proclamation are portrayed in any staunchly, or even vaguely, positive or negative light compared to the other.

- Given that this is little more than a draft of a first paragraph, it would not be fair or accurate to judge it for overrepresentation or underrepresentation. However, for what it's worth, this lead section does not focus too much on one point of view.

- As it stands, this introduction is not cited. Were it cited in the future, I would be more than willing to look into the sources and assess their reliability.

Overall, this Lead Section is satisfactory, though it could afford to show its sources.

Peer Review: Week 6
Great Job on this article thus far! I'm assuming that this article is brand new, which in that makes it more impressive! You have an active, articulate and professional voice through your writing style. I find it very clear and concise. However, although the lead provides a sufficient over view, I would provide more detail before jumping into your 3rd sentence: " Cuthbert Grant, leader of the Métis, disregarded MacDonell's proclamation...". This felt abrupt: you need to answer the 5 W's about the proclamation before bringing up why individuals may have disregarded the law. I am very glad you provided the proclamation. It provides more meat and reliability to your article! Although this is the beginning of your article, I believe that by providing more subheadings, the article will have a richer, denser and more detailed examination of this topic. Perhaps provide a historical background to Pemmican: why is it so important? Who invented? Why? Good job on the sources: There is a good balance. Great start! I look forward to reading the finished product. Alanaesimons (talk) 04:01, 16 February 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review Week 6
The article you have reviewed is very well done. You present all the important information related to the topic along with a very impressive review on the topic itself. Your wiring style is very clear and to the point, it allows for the reader to gain the main points from the review. Great job! Keep it up. JasmineQuinn