User talk:Jojo11234/Privacy (Taiwan)

Hi David, Nice to meet you! I think your translation is clear and easy to read. I did not see major grammatical errors or sentence structure issues. One point I wanted to mention is I am not sure what you meant by "those concerned by media." It would be nice if you can clarify this. Thank you.

Hi David. I think your phrasing is short and concise. The sections and paragraphs are clear and understandable. The grammar, the flow and connection between sentences are really good. There is one general concern which is that there is a lot of "it", "it is". I also use this pretty often and I wondered if using the subject itself will be clearer for the readers. Pluto desdemona 134340 (talk) 06:03, 20 March 2021 (UTC)