User talk:Jojo11234/Privacy (Taiwan)/Pancake8 Peer Review

Great article! The introduction is short and concise, and it gives readers two definitions of privacy. I think you could maybe write "Definition of Privacy" section directly below the lead section for a better flow. I feel like "Current status of privacy laws in various regions" and "International Law" could probably combine since they are both talking about laws in different regions.

The tone is neutral and there's no point appeared biased towards any viewpoint. It also didn't persuade readers. I think the content is not that up-to-date since the latest date of a mentioned source is 2013. Maybe you can research for any resources after that and include it in the article.

Overall the content could be expanded as well. In the article there is a "Press" section. This is a great point to start with because it shows the privacy issue in different fields. You could probably add more fields such as medicare, entertainment, education, and so forth. Also maybe research for more examples to back up for the points.

The grammar and writing are nice and I don't think there are spelling mistakes. Great job!