User talk:Jonahx11!/sandbox

Great ideas for edits! Use this week to draft your contributions and transfer them to the article page. Professorcravens (talk) 21:46, 16 October 2018 (UTC)

These are great edit ideas but I don't see them in the article. WarrenforPres (talk) 00:31, 26 October 2018

Influence of mass media (peer review)
'''Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?'''

No, in my opinion its a very good article if anything its a article that gets straight to the point.

'''Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?

Its very biased because its only talks about one sided of there point, like its doesn't mention how the good of the media. But saying all this this article seems very neutral because of the sources and everything like that. What they could have change or add for the future is half and half points of view from what the media does do right and how they negativity influences people in different ways.

Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?

I think its just right, there is not too many sources where it feels like there are over sourced but it also doesn't feel like there are not enough to back up there thoughts.

'''Check the citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?'''

yes, the sources links do work for the source support. The sources they choose support the claim in the article very good. Because every point they make in the article they have something to back up there thoughts so it makes the article good in my opinion.

'''Is each fact supported by an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?'''

The sources are very reliable because they are books so the information is not like from sources that are not good. The information mainly came from books and chapters from those books. The bias is little noticeable in on some points but overall its good.

'''Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that should be added?

There is not anything missing or out dated but they can add one more source or something to give the article more "life" but its a good article overall, there are not alot of negative things about it. Plus, its readable and thats a good thing too.

Soical Media (peer review)
'''Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you? '''

Yes, everything in this article is relevant to the topic an there is not anything that distracted me from getting to there main point that the writer wanted to get across.

'''Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?'''

There does not seem like there is any type of bias from reading the article in my opinion an that is a good thing. This articles does talk about the good, bad and give the reader a real general respective too.

Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?

There are a lot of sources but in this article they use a lot of statistics things to back up what they feel so its kind of understandable on why they have tons of sources. Because they do not want to make the reader seem like there just making things up to benefit.

'''Check the citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article? ''' All the source and the link do work. The sources do all support the claims that they want to prove in the article

'''Is each fact supported by an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?'''

All the sources from what iv clicked on seem very reliable for the information that the article is trying to get things from. There is not a lot of bias as much, but in some points they try to make you can read some bias facts but that with a lot of articles, so that one thing they can try to change or add.

'''Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that should be added?'''

There is not any out dated information or sources from what iv readied. What could have been added is more of how social media is a positive thing and also a negative thing.

Final Edits Evaluation (11-2-18)
There is a such thing as good propaganda and bad. The definition of propaganda is the ideas spread to influence public opinion for or against a cause. This tacit is used a lot during election year so the democracies can bring down the republicans and vice versa. Also Kids often watch TV and have phones plus are being told what to do and what's "tending" right in the palm of there hands, every second and every hour. Parents can only control a certain amount of information that their child is receiving on a daily. In saying that, bad influences can come from bad propaganda by the media and make it seem "okay in the public eye" when really its not. Propaganda targets kids because kids easily influenced and can be persuade more often to do things or want something. Propaganda is a lot back in the days because technology was not as huge has it is now so that is something to factor in also. Back in the 50's and 60's companies used posters and imaging to get try and influences people, now its on TVs and are phones with adds.

The negative side about propaganda is that it can be very misleading and can be very bias towards something so much that it tends to leave out other important information that the people trying to get people to be influenced would not want to hear so they leave it out on purpose. This tacit has been used for hundreds of years and is used for everything from election year to buying fast food. According to a article called " How Can Propaganda be Both Positive and Negative" by Hasa the example he uses to make his point across on how propaganda can have a negative influence on people is the German government under Hitler’s rule used propaganda to favor and promote Nazism. This type of propaganda effected a lot of kids there whole life because Germans made kids believe that all Jewish people are a threat to there society. When really that is not the case so this is a prime example of how propaganda can influences the life style of kids, that are not educated. Bad Propaganda lies to the people in an way so they can make a profit because that is what the companies want regardless of if it effects the people. It influences the individuals to take acts that are not acceptable and that can be very much harmful to themselves or other people around them. The biggest effect negative propaganda has is it effects the mind of the human and once you effect the mind it is very hard to undo that. This is the negative aspects that propaganda can portray to get people to think and act towards certain groups or have feelings towards country's that are misleading due to the fact that country want to have.

Now the positive part of propaganda. The positive part of it is that it can bring people together and influences people from different background to have something in common. According to a article called "50 powerful examples of visual propaganda and the meanings behind them" by Calitlin Jordan. The biggest stand out for me about a positive propaganda was poster number twelve. This poster was created in Britain during WWII. It shows guys from the Britain military an they all are different types of British citizens all coming together in one cause to save there country by coming together rather then fighting a war like this separate because of skin tone. The message is that race and class does not matter when where all in trouble, and it influences people everyone as people to come together and help their country be a better place. This type of propaganda so positive because it brings people together in a way that no other things in this world can do. The more inflectional technology becomes in our lives the more important technology becomes also. This is the positive aspects that positive propaganda can have on people to influences them to not have build separation towards a certain group of people because they act or speak a different language then you. propaganda can be beneficial to our society if we use it the right way. it keeps the people updated on current situations in our daily lives. It would be hard for companies to sell their products without it. Advertisements also use propaganda and without it. These big companies would not be as big or important as they are without propaganda in good or bad. Our world would be different without propaganda. It can be used to encourage awareness of drug effects and not to drink and drive certain things like that are considered positive propaganda.

William, Hasa. “How Can Propaganda Be Both Positive and Negative.” Pediaa.Com, 29 Dec. 2016, pediaa.com/how-can-propaganda-be-both-positive-and-negative/.

Jordan, caitlin. “50 Powerful Examples of Visual Propaganda and the Meanings behind Them – Learn.” Learn, 24 Oct. 2018, www.canva.com/learn/examples-of-propaganda/.

potential topics (2-15-19)
(1) link: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Category:Government_by_region

I choose government and region because because just like gender race has a lot to do with politics, this is relevant to our course because the government is politics and has a tie to them two just like race and gender. the reason why i'm interested in this topic is because I wanted to know how religion and government connect with each other in a good or negative way.

(2)Link: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Global_citizens_movement

My interest in this article is because I wanted to know more about movements that happen and the reasons be hide them. Growing up i heard a lot about the civil movements and etc but im sure there was more then just that one that stood out, so I wanted to know more about more movements and the cause of them. This is relevant towards are course because the LGBT movement is something that is very popular right now and they have a cause for that.

(3)Link:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Public_Opinion_(book)

I wanted to do public opinion because i feel that in today society this is something that were lacking in, the ability to speak are minds without getting threatened or harmed and etc. This ties to our course very well beacuse the LGBT community doesn't feel like there being treated equally and do not have a opinion that matters to the government or people in general.

assigned article (2-24-19)
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Transgender_people_in_sports

I wanted to talk about how transgender people have a influence in sports and the history be hide that. I play sports myself so it was just interesting on how the media and other platforms feel about it overall.

Alea's Peer Review
The lead section of Transgender people in sports could be made more neutral and better reflect the rest of the article rather than focusing solely on opposition to trans athletes. Although, I liked that the lead section was placing emphasis on opposition because it shows the importance of the article. The article seemed to be well organized and structured. But I would suggest adding to the historical timeline of trans athletes as well as maybe a section about legislation/court cases involving trans athletes. The article felt fairly balanced and neutral but small edits could be made to make it more balanced/neutral. Some of the athletes mentioned did not have links to their wiki pages so there might be some updating needed there. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Anaber123 (talk • contribs) 01:20, 15 March 2019 (UTC)

transgender in sports 4/12/19
Sports have been around for decades and have been a positive thing for the world because it brings people together from all race, gender and religion at one moment. Transgenders and the LGBT community have been becoming a great movement and have expanding there voice for a while now. Transgenders have been in sports and have been being in a news these last couple of years and been talked about in a negative light. Lots of transgender who go from being male to female that participate in sports don't get the same treatment. The more the LGBT people get equality in the world the more people would have to get use to these things in the sports world, sports are for everyone to enjoy from watching it to even being apart of it

A number of high schools in Connecticut were highly upset at this teen named Andraya Yearwood who is 17 teen years old. She identified herself as a trans gender women, who switched her gender at the age of 13. She grew up as a male but always felt like a girl and her family and her thought it would be a great idea to change her gender. She always liked to run and once played football, so she tried out for her high school and made the team. She runs the 100 minters and the relay. She is amazing track runner and has been on the news for her talent but tons of people are giving her backlash due to being once a male at some point and believe that she has a physical edge over other track runners who were birth female. Andraya has lost a lot of scholarships from college because there scared that they can lose money due to accepting her on there team. Andraya has mentioned that her doing this is opening the doors for the sports world to accept transgenders and gays for who they are. Also mentioning that "Back in June of 2018, she and her family appeared on Good Morning America in front of a national audience to speak about a petition that circulated to prevent transgender girls like Andraya from running in the girls division in Connecticut. Her voice was strong, firm. She encouraged other transgender girls to follow their hearts, to do what they want to do in life." She can inspire other transgender people to do what they feel is right regardless of the hate you receive.

MMA is a physical sport that can be very life treating, there have been fighters who have broken bones, head injury's and etc. There is a fighter that certainly is involved into the sport named "Fallon Fox" she is the first MMA fighter in history to come out as transgender and as soon as she did tons of people hated that. She received lots of backlash for trying to fight women and was being called abusive but that did not stop other female fighters from calling her out to fight. In 2014 fallon fox fought Tamika Brents on live television and this was the first fight fallon has fought while coming out into the public, so the ratings on this fight was "out of this world". Fallon Fox who but its the way she won, Tamika ended up with a broken skull and a concussion, plus had to sent to the hospital as soon as possible because the damage was very life threatening. Tamika could have lost her life that night. few months after the fight was over a quote from Tamika about the fight she said "I’ve fought a lot of women and have never felt the strength that I felt in a fight as I did that night, I’ve never felt so overpowered ever in my life and I am an abnormally strong female in my own right." This was a bad look for Fallon and after other female mma fighters seen this they didn't want to fight her either.

Equality is something that everyone wants in the world from your race to your gender and even religion, everyone just wants to be treated equally. But, there are things that people dislike when it comes to gender sports due to many physical reason. All men and women are not built the same physically so there would be a advantage for males compared to females, these are the things that people say when seeing MMA transgender almost kill women or out run women in track. Sports are meant to being people together not divide because of someones gender, We as a whole need to improve on making people who are transgender more comfortable in to the sports would and look at the talent instead of what they identify as.

References

1. Fader, Mirin. “Andraya Yearwood Knows She Has the Right to Compete.” Bleacher Report, Bleacher Report, 17 Dec. 2018, bleacherreport.com/articles/2810857-andraya-yearwood-the-right-to-compete.

2. Pool, caldron. “Transgender MMA .” Caldron Pool Events, 14 Nov. 2018, caldronpool.com/transgender-mma-fighter.

Reflective Essay 4/25/2019
I learned a lot about Wikipedia during the article evaluation because this was my first time really doing that for the first time. The way I approach the critiquing the article was by trying to find something that i had interests in for a while and have it for my article. I found out things to add out side of school so I thought it would be cool to bring it to my article to make it better. What I edited for this article was a story I heard on social media one day and it just came to mind about a trans MMA fighter so I thought it would be cool to make it relevant. I felt these edits I added was valuable because theses two events that included people who were involved in the LGBT community and tried to break threw in the sports world. I think it was cool to know and have knowledge about these events that possibly changed sports forever. I think my last version was better then the first time I seen the article before i added my edits because it gives more up to date stories about LGBT people in sports. The peer review was really cool, I enjoyed giving my feed back and try to help them have a better article but with my peer review, they did a great job so they really didn't need my feed back. the process was that I would first read the edits they included into the article then after I would read the whole article in full to see how it flows within the article. The next thing I would do is give my feed back on the new part they added. Also I would read there sources to see if there reliable. What I contribute in my review was to make the sentences flow better and change some wording to improve the edits because you want to get your main point across without making it difficult to read for someone else. my peer told me that I did a good job but what I could have changed was the length could have be a issue in some cases so I wanted to make it a little shorter for other readers who will take there time to read this in the future. I do not think I got any feed back from other editors. I learned that Wikipedia is not as bad as people say it is, growing up in school that's all iv been told is that to not get my sources from wiki because it not reliable but until I started to do things on it myself. I think my past work looking at it now was not that bad but I have improved a lot since then. I think they can improve is by not just letting anybody edit articles and they can only have educational people edit like students or colleges. This would be important because people would take the sources and edits more seriously. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jonahx11! (talk • contribs) 02:59, 26 April 2019 (UTC)