User talk:Jonathano1/sandbox

Peer Review 12/4 Nick Perry
So far the lead is straight forward and it goes straight to the introduction of the topic. He provides many evidence regarding his claim and he adds it to the article paragraphs and something that is missing is the part explaining his claim and referring it to the introduction. It is not in order yet because he did not finish. It is well balanced but he needs to finish the rest. He says the word, "I" a lot. He has many sources and they are verified sources.