User talk:Jorf5/sandbox

Great work and excellent reviews. As pointed out by the reviewers, please follow the wikipedia citation format (using footnotes) and check reference format in general. Let me know if you have any questions or need help with this. --Amille75 (talk) 04:40, 7 December 2015 (UTC)

A. General Comments: 1. Based on your article I believe you are talking about A. Americana and why it would be a good species for domestication for a future food source. 2. Everything relates to the main message of this article. 3. There is a lot of discussion on the viability of this plant to mice, why is that? It looks like you didn't draw that much from the Li article, perhaps try to find an article that you can get more information from - that way you can sum up the article with the mice in a more concise manner. Currently it felt as though you got a little side-tracked.

B. Grammar: 1. The grammar looks fine. I suggest splitting up your paper by idea. It would make it flow better if you added paragraphs. 2. Scientific names are written properly.

C. References There are 5 distinct references. However, the references are in-text and the full citation is not available. It is possible to add a link to a full citation on the bottom of your article. I suggest you go ahead and do that.

D. Overall it looks good, and you have all of your information together. The main thing is to not focus on each article but try to tie all the articles together in relation to your main topic. It can get confusing why things such as comparisons with other potatoes and beans are relevant to your specific species. --Premaldesai05 (talk) 22:14, 28 November 2015 (UTC)Premal Desai

General comments: •	Take home message: The group Apios americana have significant potential to be used as a nutritional source for humans as well as play a role in preventing diabetes. •	Interesting that it helps with diabetes! •	Nice that you explained what genistein was because I had no idea when I read that word •	Well worded and easy to follow and understand •	Maybe add an ending sentence that sums up your essay •	What are superior germplasms?

Grammar: •	“However, the relative safety and toxicity…” I think you may have forgotten a word or something. •	Now that the toxicity of A. Americana is determined, it is….” – comma added •	Starch spelled wrong in sentence starting “The tuber and the flower…” •	In sentence starting, “These results suggest…” – have the potential?

References: •	Don’t need the in-text citations that you have – you can put the superscript 1 and then that reference will be listed at bottom of page. (Use insert citation button) •	I counted 4 references, but I may have missed one. You need 5 total so just make sure! •	Also, there isn’t a reference list at bottom with full citations. When you do the superscripts, it will add this to the bottom of your essay.

McKenna Murphy

General Comments: Interesting article! The take home message that I identified was the plant adapts well to various environments and offers some nutritional and health benefits. I liked that you compared other similar plants when discussing the nutritional information. I also thought your comment about its contribution to diabetes prevention was interesting! As I was reading the article, I felt that you could have transitioned from the general information about adaptability and future crop development to the nutritional and toxicity information a little better. Perhaps separating the paragraphs, or an additional transition sentence would help the article flow better. I think there may have been a typo in the sentence "However, the relative safety and toxicity of the plant to make sure that it is completely edible for global and commercial use." This could have been a strong transition sentence if complete, but it doesn't make sense as an incomplete sentence.

Grammar:There are a couple misspelled words throughout the article. "Several genotypes were shown to have very high yieds," I think yieds was probably meant to read "yields." In the nutritional analysis, "startch" should read "starch." The scientific names seem to be written correctly, however, there were a couple sentences that would read more easily with a comma. For example, "Now that the toxicity of A. americana has been determined (comma) it is important to see if there is any nutritional value in this particular plant."

References: I was only able to identify four distinct references, as they were written as in-text citations. It would be easier to analyze the references if they were included at the end as a list, but they each appear to be credible sources and the in-text citations seem to be cited correctly. Overall, I thought this article was interesting and aside from the small grammatical typos, I thought it was a well written article! One question I was wondering about was what climate was the best for this particular plant?

Scott Libera