User talk:Jorge ozco

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Hi, Jorge, you can sign your comments automatically using four tildes ~. I disagree with the assertion that the language was not promotional. For example, take this section: '' It was designed to be a guide for the future of the arts in Chicago and laid a strong foundation for the diverse and rich array of facilities, programs and cultural identity that has informed Chicago's rich cultural life for over 25 years. In fact, the Department of Cultural Affairs was one of the significant results which grew out of a recommendation informed by the 1983 Transition Team report to Mayor Harold Washington and the 1986 Chicago Cultural Plan.'' I've bolded examples of opinions presented as fact, not sourced to independent verifiable sources. Having looked again, I don't think it is irremediable, so I'll shortly put it here for you to work on before trying again  Jimfbleak -  talk to me?  18:44, 23 January 2012 (UTC)

Thanks, Jim
I'll work on this immediately and get these wrinkles worked out. So am I take this as the language I was using here sounds like an unsubstantiated endorsement/promotion? And, if I stick with more statements that were (a) more straightforward or (b) cited with a reliable sources such as Chicago Tribune or other publication would work?

--Jorge ozco (talk) 19:06, 23 January 2012 (UTC)


 * Yes, just make sure it's neutral and sourced. Work on the text in the sandbox I created above, and move it to article space when you're happy &mdash; or ask me to have look if you're not sure.  Jimfbleak -  talk to me?  19:14, 23 January 2012 (UTC)


 * So, I went through and edited the entry as per your recommendation. I, also, added a few more citations and plan to add more in the future. Would you mind reviewing and letting me know if this will cause any additional issues or deletions? Also, if it does look acceptable, what do I need to do to post live. Thank again.

--Jorge ozco (talk) 20:17, 23 January 2012 (UTC)
 * I made these changes to create a lead section and tidy up a bit. Note the following:
 * Refs should follow punctuation, not precede
 * I've move the Dorf ref in-line, might not have put in in the right place, please check
 * I've added a couple of tags where it might be helpful to reference
 * If you need to use the same ref again, instead of starting the ref with
 * To get the text to article space, use the "move" button that should be shown in the navigation bar.


 *  Jimfbleak -  talk to me?  06:54, 24 January 2012 (UTC)

Finish all the added edits, added citations, etc. but cannot find the "move" button. It's not appearing in the navigation. Should I just go ahead and add as new entry?

--Jorge ozco (talk) 16:33, 24 January 2012 (UTC)