User talk:Jorozco07/sandbox

Well written article. Double check spelling and some of the sentence structures. Consider adding some more information on why the cause of this condition is unknown in the cause section. --Nskumar01 (talk) 15:36, 15 November 2019 (UTC)

-I double checked spelling and rearranged some sentences especially on the Mechanism and Research section I hope things are more clear now. One of the research articles under the research section talks about why the cause of this condition is unknown and what can potential explain the unknown cause.

Your article has all the prerequisites needed and your sections satisfy all the requirements. The only thing is that there are sentences that sound weird, but other than that its okay! Good job! Hesther23 (talk) 18:26, 15 November 2019 (UTC)

-I rearranged some sentences hope its better now!

--Sweiner02 (talk) 05:11, 4 December 2019 (UTC)
 * You have added a lot of good material to the original article! The prognosis section is helpful and clear!
 * Remove the abstract header.
 * Epidemiology is a little unclear. What do you mean by those percentages? What are they percentages of?

-I removed the abstract header and rearranged the epidemiology sentences that we spoke about in class that sounded unclear which included the percentages that you stated seemed out of place. --Jorozco07 (talk) 17:18, 13 December 2019 (UTC)--Jorozco07 (talk) 17:18, 13 December 2019 (UTC)