User talk:JoseVasquez42/sandbox

Interesting article evaluation, Jose! I hope this helps you to identify the shortcomings in the article you will work on for this project. If you follow this template and ask yourself these questions of the article you choose to edit, you will produce a thoughtful and well-researched draft. Griffyn1987 (talk) 19:20, 21 February 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review by Saad Negm - Transnationailty (Article Draft by José Vasquez)

Hello José! First, I would like to say how great it is that you have identified some key aspects of the article that you want to improve. You mention how "very vague" the current article is and that its language is "not approachable to a general audience". I can definitely agree with these two points being an important element to focus on when working on this article. I too have noticed, depending on the field of study the articles’ content relates to, that many articles’ wordings seem to be written in a method by which university graduates and researchers structure their findings in their papers. It’s indeed great that you and your team will turn an article that is not so easy to read into an article anybody with a common understanding of the English language can comprehend.

It sounds like an excellent idea to include a list of companies and organizations that function beyond and within many different state lines. This, however, may be a little risky and will require close attention to the selected companies’ function and production methods. I also recommend to do research on what exactly makes an already officially established transnational company or organization what it is. There are likely to be different possibilities in becoming a transnational company or organization and listing the different methods (with one or two real examples of institutions that fit the description) may help out in fleshing out the article.

This idea of updating the article is very important in my eyes. The advantage of Wikipedia is that it is somewhat an organic, living encyclopedia that perpetually grows and adapts. Adding real world examples of corporate entities and organizations that functions and influences by means of transnationality to the article will certainly help the article grow and provide more useful and relatable information to the subject. I’m pretty convinced that you and your team will provide a great addition to the article and the worldwide Wikipedia editing team. S. S. Negm 14:43, 8 March 2019 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Saad.Negm (talk • contribs)

Hello Saad, thank you very much for your feedback and review. I agree with the points that you made, especially the fact that the language was hard to understand and used a lot of political jargon that needed to be replaced for the general public to understand the actual context of the article. I had a little trouble understanding it at first myself but through further academic research I am more confident in the way I can provide this information in a more general language. I also appreciate your point of developing the list of Transnational companies and agree with you that this is a little risky as there is a thin line that divides transnational companies from multinational companies and thus finding that separation and providing that information in a Wikipedia page without using hard technicalities or any jargon would prove to be a challenge I am not qualified to approach. However, your points made me realize this addition was rather ambitious and unfortunately beyond my capabilities. I would really like to add this to Wikipedia however I am not sure myself if I understand the information and how to provide it. Thank you for your feedback and best of luck with your project. — Preceding unsigned comment added by JoseVasquez42 (talk • contribs) 22:27, 17 March 2019 (UTC)