User talk:JosephLMarques/Internet censorship in New Zealand

Peer Review: Censorship in New Zealand
Given your introduction that narrows censorship to the category for blocking material that includes information which deals with the sexual exploitation of young children, I just wanted to ask whether New Zealand's national definition of censorship is in fact this narrow (it may as well be--which then would make sense with the way the intro is written--but just wanted to make sure you weren't accidentally narrowing yourself to this subset of censorship in the intro)?

The sentence that begins with "The DIA then uses the Border Gateway Protocol..." is a little wordy and confusing..

I would consider moving the history section up before the technical details. The history section also looks like it has some good information, but the flow of the material feels a little choppy and disconnected.

I would also be cautionary when dealing with the controversy section to maintain a neutral tone. I know it says sources already found but would also make sure that information is coming from multiple sources to try and guard against that.

I would maybe see if there is a government specific section you could add/use to to filter the gov related info you have currently?

Your citations are looking great and thorough. Great work overall!