User talk:Joshua Gramley/sandbox2

=Peer Evaluations=

05/11/2019 Evaluation by WavesOfAmur

 * Points: 33.5/40
 * Grade: 84%

I think you did an even greater job than the previous edit! Everything looks superb, almost like reading an actual wikipedia article. I especially appreciated the statistical portion, stats are always a major plus! Here is my take on it:

Spelling/Grammar exceeds expectations - looks great thus far. However, I noticed one line: "In the 1970s and 80s, heroin and cocaine use and trafficking became a significant issue for the neighborhood" - perhaps change "heroin and cocaine use and trafficking..." to "heroin, cocaine use, and trafficking..." for a slight better flow? If that's your stylistic choice, then don't worry about it!

Language exceeds expectations - excellent

Organization exceeds expectations - I don't think anyone can beat you in organization!

Coding meets expectations - probably perfect, I'm not sure how to tell, exactly. Don't see how we can tell whether another person has "red error messages" et al, or not.

Validity meets expectations - looks pertinent and, as outlined before usage of stats makes this beyond great!

Completion meets expectations - at the moment, it is obviously not entirely complete. It doesn't matter that much that it doesn't exceed, as I'm sure you'll finish this portion off in no time!

Relevance meets expectations - indubitably relevant. Don't see anything really irrelevant, though I think that, in accordance with what Dr. Wright said the 'hard topics' were (ie. culture, politics, economics or social identity), demographics may not necessarily fit into these categories. I, personally think it fits in great, but it's just something I noticed. While it mentions the different ethnicities coexisting in that region of Spain, it does not necessarily talk about, for example, 'social identity' - I would say that it should be kept, but it's something I'm pointing out as an intrigue. You did great on it, regardless!!

Citations exceeds expectations - sources look great!

References meets expectations - need 2 more, but I'm sure that's not a big deal, given how much work you've already put in.

5/11/2019 Evaluation by User:BethanyJJohnson
Points: 35/40 Grade: 88%

Spelling/Grammar - 4

"El Raval developed a reputation for poverty and criminality" Should this be 'of' rather than 'for'?

Language - 3

"with some sparse population along its main routes." I would omit 'some' here. "Coal-fueled textile mills proliferated" I'd use another word than 'proliferated, since you used it in the sentence right before this one.

"According to Barcelona's 2016 census, El Raval is home to 47,986 inhabitants." I'd go with something more along the lines of "In 2016 El Raval was recorded to have 47,986 residents", since it isn't current data, and that number has most likely changed in the last three years.

Organization - 4

I'd change the 'Early 20th Century' to just '20th Century' since it includes information about the 1980s.

"Racial prejudice against non-Western immigrants is prevalent in El Raval.[2][4][7] Rhetorical associations of immigrants with the drug trade has resulted in more intensive policing of bars where they congregate.[4]" Not sure if this should go under the 'Culture' section.

Coding - 2

Could use several more links to other wiki articles

Validity - 4

Meets standards

Completion - 3

Looks like you have notes in here that you're planning to add more later.

Relevance - 4

You could probably remove the info about the policing of bars from the culture section.

Sources - 4

Several academic sources

Citations - 3

"Immigrants currently comprise 49.6% of the neighborhood's population." Needs citation Several statements without citations, but I couldn't tell if they were just missing, or included with the citation for the next statements.

References - 4

Meets expectations

BethanyJJohnson (talk) 04:28, 12 May 2019 (UTC)

5/16/2019 Evaluation by Escheit2
Escheit2 (talk) 20:26, 16 May 2019 (UTC) Spelling/Grammar exceeds expectations - I think you did a really good job on this section. Couldn't even find an error. Overall very well done here

Language exceeds expectations - You shared a very strong tone in it and this tone was mature and very informative, which is what we want to see in this.

Organization meets expectations- It looked great! It looks like a wikipedia page so that is always good. Your sentence structure seems to flow well, and overall seems good.

Coding meets expectations -I cant see any errors.

Validity meets expectations -You sound and it appears that your credible as a person, so your good in validity.

Completion meets expectations - at the moment, it is obviously not entirely complete. It doesn't matter that much that it doesn't exceed, as I'm sure you'll finish this portion off in no time!

Relevance meets expectations - Nothing came up as irrelevant. You genuinely did a great job. This looks like a Wikipedia page. Citations exceeds- you got 12 on there, so it looks good.

References meets expectations - Looks great!

Comments Overall: It honestly looks great and I can't find much wrong with it. I would only add on to what you are saying. Maybe you could add a history of the name, and why it got such name.

5/22/19 Evaluation by GbrooksPDXStudent

 * Points: 41.5

Spelling/Grammar Exceeds Standard: 4.5

Through most of the piece, I didn't find any major grammatical errors and thought it flowed quite nicely in structure.

Language Meets Standard: 4

Like your tone and a lot of the word choice for each paragraph, has plenty of descriptive wording without too much unnecessary fluff.

Organization Meets Standard: 4

Well thought out timeline of the city's past and excellent addition of demographics and the culture.

Coding Exceeds Standard: 4.5

Didn't see much wrong with the coding, lots of the sections are defined by the legend and well laid out.

Validity Meets Standard: 4

Most of the sources appeared genuine and without highly suspicious or blatantly wrong information.

Completion Meets Standard: 4

Tons of information on the history and culture but the demographics section certainly could be fleshed out or removed.

Relevance Meets Standard: 4

I doubt I'll ever visit El Raval, but with such a rich history and culture it certainly seems like a city with a story to tell.

Sources Meets Standard: 4

Sources are both academic and creditable.

Citations Exceeds Standard: 4.5

Citations are both present and in perfect format.

References Meets Standard: 4

References are all accounted for, most being properly cited and or linked.

GbrooksPDXStudent (talk) 06:17, 23 May 2019 (UTC)

=Prof Evaluation=

6/6/2019 Evaluation by DrMichaelWright
DrMichaelWright (talk) 10:05, 6 June 2019 (UTC)

I'm extremely impressed with this. I really hope that you add it to the current El Raval article, the English-language version of which seems to really need a lot of help.


 * Points: 42.5/40
 * Grade: 106.25%

Spelling/Grammar
Meets standard.

Language
Meets standard.
 * "...inhabitants didn't survive..." Avoid contractions in formal writing.

Organization
Exceeds standard.

Coding
Exceeds standard.

Validity
Meets standard.

Completion
Exceeds standard. Above and beyond!

Relevance
Exceeds standard.