User talk:Jpena001/sandbox

Samanta Peer Review

Hi Julia, I really enjoyed reading your article because I learned many new facts about V-Live. In the information box it says "Parent Naver Corporation" maybe change it to "Owned by" or "Created by." Also it says it was launched in July 2015 but then in the article you write it was launched in late August 2015. Make sure to verify this. Also when you talk about Naver Corporation make sure to always refer to it by that (Sometimes you call it Naver only). When you say "but was eventually launched with IOS," maybe add a date so it is more informational. When reading I was curious to know which 7 languages are available for V-Live, maybe this is something you can add to your article. "V Live has over 700 channels associated with different K-pop artists, including K-pop's biggest names: BTS, Big Bang, Exo, Got7, Seventeen and Black pink." This sentence could be more objective if you omit "K-Pop biggest names." When you write "50 for $1 USD" I am not sure you have to have both $ and USD. Your article looks great overall, hope my suggestions help!

Alex Peer Review
You should add a lead so that people visiting your article know what it’s about! You can include basic background info here, and I think your first section “V Live” can be turned into lead.

“In 2007, Naver launched it's video platform channel.” should be “In 2007, Naver launched its video platform channel.” Also, I would give the name of the video platform channel and also list which countries it was unavailable in. If possible, I would also add why it was unavailable in these countries.

“IOS” should be “iOS”

When you say “which has grown to be 7 languages to date”, I would change it to “which has grown to be 7 languages as of April 2018”.

“Users can comment or send hearts on videos” I would elaborate on what hearts are. (i.e. “Users can comment or send hearts on videos, analogous to Facebook likes”)

“Having a high chemi-heat increases the user's chances of winning an event hosted by a celebrity.” I think it would be really interesting to read about what kinds of events people have won in the past! Also, does the person with the highest chemi-beat win or is it just random with people with higher chemi-beats more likely to win?

I would give examples of content that you can buy with V coins!

"V live" in the "Influence On Hallyu" section should be "V Live" to be more consistent with the rest of the article

Great job overall! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ajang7 (talk • contribs) 05:47, 4 April 2018 (UTC)