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Comments on Wiki Draft

1." Not clear where this will fit - already a section called Regional Differences. Is this the lead for that section? (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Peruvian_cuisine#Regional_differences)

2. opening sentence is vague: "Peru has lots of culture and history tied into its traditional cuisine, and a lot of this comes from the regions where the crops were produced" esp since existing lead is more specific: "Peru is a country that holds not just a variety of ethnic mixes since times ranging from the Inca Empire, the Viceroyalty and the Republic, but also a climatic variety of 28[7] individual climates. The mixing of cultures and the variety of climates differ from city to city so geography, climate, culture and ethnic mix determine the variety of local cuisine."

3. clunky - "common to find different popular cuisine from one city to the next"

4. Significance? - "Peru is also home to Lake Titicaca, the highest lake in the entire world at roughly 12,500 feet above sea level."

5. eg in comment #2 articulates what you're trying to say here, but more concisely: With these unique geographical features located so closely together, Peru maintains one of the most diverse arrays of cuisine in the entire world. However, geography is not the only thing that separates Peru into different regions. Peru still has remnants of cuisine from centuries ago, inspired by the ancient Incas, the colonial Spanish and mestizos, and hundreds of years of immigration from other countries." Good point about immigration, though.

6. clarify - "widespread culinary option in the world"

7. no academic sources consulted

Melaniehuska (talk) 11:14, 16 April 2017 (UTC)