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Evaluation of an Article
The article I have chosen to evaluate is on Sophia Perovskaya. This article is rated as start class for three different wiki projects: Biography, Russian History, and Women's History. Not much information is given on the famous Russian anarchist who is best known for her role in killing the Tsar Alexander II. The page itself is written okay, but could use some serious structural work to make the information read easier and to distinguish the different aspects of her life. For a page that has the potential for bias it does a decent job of staying neutral. What this page could use the most is more sources and deeper look at her role in the Russian resistance group Narodnaya Volya. With the addition of these two things along with edits to the structure of this page, Sophia Perovskaya would be better represented.

Selection of an article
As I searched through the stub pages relating to women's history I found several suitable articles that needed both serious maintenance and information.

The first being the article I selected for critique on the last exercise Sophia Perovskaya. Not much more needs to be said on what needs to be added in this article, due to the fact that I have addressed this previously, however I have found more sources that would significantly help bolster up this article and provide more information on her. Eva Sohlman wrote a piece in the New York Times on her, published in June 25, 2018. This work was apart of belated obituaries of historical figures that have been overlooked and gives more insight into her legacy, which was a section that lacked substance in Perovskaya's page.

The second article that lacked substantial information was the Suicide of Amina Filali. The page itself is less then a paragraph in length and lacks adequate sources. For an action that sparked a feminist movement in morocco, this article was not given proper treatment. Just with a simple journal search of her name I have found two academic articles that help provide information on the rape culture of morroco that sparked the suicide and an analysis of the reaction to her death. The two articles are https://www.tandfonline.com/doi/abs/10.1080/13629387.2013.858033 and https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC3743999/

The third article that intrigued me for a myriad of reasons was the article on Eliza Bisbee Duffey. The page itself is terribly formatted. It reads as a shot gun blast of facts with little to no organization or division. The piece itself lacks important citations and is in need of more sources. Duffey herself was incredible women who made a wave with her pro-female writings, her poetry, artwork, and as an editor of a newspaper. She was important figure in history, and with some edits and more information her page could really provide a well rounded picture of this special person. As for sources I have found several that would help add citations to claims and to bulster up the article itself. The first being a book about artists in Ohio https://books.google.com/books?id=ZdICm_W8xKwC&pg=PA86&lpg=PA86&dq=eliza+bisbee+duffey&source=bl&ots=s7iEJiKI9r&sig=DMs_81kntkjF2rSugm_NxXnKw9M&hl=en&sa=X&ved=2ahUKEwjZgMDprfbeAhWLuFMKHaWnDzQQ6AEwCnoECAcQAQ#v=onepage&q=eliza%20bisbee%20duffey&f=false. The second source is a book about white american feminists that includes sections on Duffey. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jperry98 (talk • contribs) 06:37, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

'I have chosen the third article--Jperry98 (talk) 07:06, 28 November 2018 (UTC)' — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jperry98 (talk • contribs) 07:01, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

My Edits
Personal Life Eliza Bisbee Duffey (1838-1898) was a Victorian-era American painter, author, poet, newspaper editor and printer, columnist, spiritualist, and feminist who published several books in defense of women's rights. Duffey was born to Cordelia and Charles A.Bisbee and raised in Geauga County, Ohio. While in Ohio she spent her early years working for the Jeffersonian Democrat as a printer. After moving to Columbus, Ohio to help edit the publication The Alliance, She met her husband, John B. Duffey.

From 1861 to 1867 the Duffey's resided in Philadelphia. While there Eliza Bisbee Duffey exhibited her paintings at the Pennsylvania Academy of the Fine Arts where she eventually became an Associate Member. By 1867 the Duffeys were living in Woodbury, New Jersey until relocating to Vineland, New Jersey in 1872 where she and her husband became editors and publishers of the Vineland Times in 1877.

The Duffeys moved several more times moving up through New York state, and ending in the south..

Eliza was a strong advocate for equality between men and women. She published several essay's and books about female sexual health and education, Education for women, Gender roles and the ideal world for both men and women. These works have influenced many reformers and advocates after her. Her body of work on gender issues includes articles, such as Women's Work and Women's Wages (1870) in Arthur's Illustrated, and several books such as What Women Should Know: A Woman's Book about Women, Containing Practical Information for Wives and Mothers(1873),The Relations of the Sexes(1889), and The Ladies' and Gentlemen's Etiquette: A Complete Manual of the Manners and Dress of American Society. Containing Forms of Letters, Invitations, Acceptances and Regrets. With a Copious Index (1877).--Jperry98 (talk) 18:14, 28 November 2018 (UTC) --Jperry98 (talk) 19:00, 28 November 2018 (UTC)--Jperry98 (talk) 19:06, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review
The lead feels a bit too much like a summary rather than a lead. It could be improved by highlighting her contributions as a women's rights advocate. It would also benefit from addressing what will be in the content of the article. However, it gives good general information about the subject.

The original article lacks any form of organization whatsoever. Your edits help improve this issue. Making a section for personal life was a good start, consider making more sections to improve clarity of structure.

The section lengths seem to be proportionate to importance- again making explicit sections would be beneficial. The original article seems to be subjective and informal, whilst your edits are neutral and informative.

You did a good job bringing in more sources. This strengthens the validity of the article. Your subjective and academic tone make for a well-written article. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jbuttz1113 (talk • contribs) 22:12, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

Katie's peer review
Personal Life Eliza Bisbee Duffey (1838-1898) was a Victorian-era American painter, author, poet, newspaper editor and printer, columnist, spiritualist, and feminist who published several books in defense of women's rights. Duffey was born to Cordelia and Charles A.Bisbee (a) and raised in Geauga County, Ohio. While in Ohio she spent her early years working for the Jeffersonian Democrat (b) as a printer. After moving to Columbus, Ohio to help edit the publication The Alliance, She met her husband, John B. Duffey.[1]

From 1861 to 1867 (c) the Duffey's resided in Philadelphia. While there (c) Eliza Bisbee Duffey exhibited her paintings at the Pennsylvania Academy of the Fine Arts (d) where she eventually became an Associate Member. By 1867 (c) the Duffeys were living in Woodbury, New Jersey until relocating to Vineland, New Jersey in 1872 (c) where she and her husband became editors and publishers of the Vineland Times in 1877.[2]

The Duffeys moved several more times moving up through New York state, and ending in the south..[3] (e)

Eliza was a strong advocate for equality between men and women. She published several essay's and books about female sexual health and education, Education for women, Gender roles (f) and the ideal world for both men and women. These works have influenced many reformers and advocates after her. Her body of work on gender issues includes articles, such as Women's Work and Women's Wages (1870) in Arthur's Illustrated, and several books such as What Women Should Know: A Woman's Book about Women, Containing Practical Information for Wives and Mothers(1873),The Relations of the Sexes(1889), and The Ladies' and Gentlemen's Etiquette: A Complete Manual of the Manners and Dress of American Society. Containing Forms of Letters, Invitations, Acceptances and Regrets. With a Copious Index (1877). (g)


 * (a) Need a space between A.Bisbee
 * (b) What is the Jeffersonian Democrat? Looks like there is no wiki page for it, but if its a newspaper, it should be italicized. Same with The Alliance and the Vineland Times.
 * (c) comma necessary
 * (d) Make sure you add links (to other wiki pages) for things like this!
 * (e) I'm not sure that this sentence needs to be its own little paragraph! Also there are 2 periods.
 * (f) Do Education and Gender need to be capitalized?
 * (g) Make sure you properly italicize all these book titles!


 * I'm not quite sure if "Personal Life" is a proper heading for the info here, because you have discussed a lot of her career and works.

Overall really great!

--Kmcfar HIS475 (talk) 23:25, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

More edits
Personal Life Eliza Bisbee Duffey (1838-1898) was a Victorian-era American painter, author, poet, newspaper editor and printer, columnist, spiritualist, and feminist who published several books in defense of women's rights. Duffey was born to Cordelia and Charles A. Bisbee and raised in Geauga County, Ohio. While in Ohio she spent her early years working for the Jeffersonian Democrat as a printer. After moving to Columbus, Ohio to help edit the publication The Alliance, She met her husband, John B. Duffey.[1]

From 1861 to 1867 the Duffey's resided in Philadelphia. While there Eliza Bisbee Duffey exhibited her paintings at the Pennsylvania Academy of the Fine Arts where she eventually became an Associate Member. By 1867, the Duffeys were living in Woodbury, New Jersey until relocating to Vineland, New Jersey in 1872 where she and her husband became editors and publishers of the Vineland Times in 1877.[2]The Duffeys moved several more times moving up through New York state, and ending in the south.[3]

Eliza was a strong advocate for equality between men and women. She published several essay's and books about female sexual health and education, education for women, gender roles and the ideal world for both men and women. These works have influenced many reformers and advocates after her. Her body of work on gender issues includes articles, such as Women's Work and Women's Wages (1870) in Arthur's Illustrated, and several books such as What Women Should Know: A Woman's Book about Women, Containing Practical Information for Wives and Mothers(1873), The Relations of the Sexes(1889), and ''The Ladies' and Gentlemen's Etiquette: A Complete Manual of the Manners and Dress of American Society. Containing Forms of Letters, Invitations, Acceptances and Regrets. With a Copious Index'' (1877)

Scholarly Work As an ardent Feminist in the Victorian Era, Eliza Bisbee Duffey made waves with her pro-female writing. As a writer She engaged Edward Hammond Clarke in a debate on educating females. Clarke wrote an extremely popular book entitled Sex in Education; or, A Fair Chance for the Girls in which he argued against educating women in the same environment as men due to their supposed intellectual disadvantages. Brisbee responded to Clarke's arguments with her book No Sex in Education; Or, An Equal Chance for Both Boys and Girls (1874) in which she advocated for the for the equal and co-education of both genders.

Duffey continued to take controversial stances. The next topic she tackled was the relationship between men and women. In her book The Relations of the Sexes (1876), she discussed a myriad of topics from the biology of each one of the sexes to problems faced by women in marriage. On of the most bold proclamations she makes in her book was on the issue of non-consensual sex in marriage. She believed that marital rape was a real crime that was being committed and that it should be seen as equal to other forms of rape. In addition, she discussed spousal abuse of and argued that brutality should be sufficient grounds for divorce. She continued this proposition in many of her writing and in one of her articles, she went a far to say that women were "no more bound to yield to her body to her husband after the marriage between them, than she was before, until she feels that she can do with the full tide of willingness and affection. In continuation, her work and writing in The Relations of the Sexes (1876), illustrated how changing ideas in science impacted society's views on once popular opinions. For, instance she takes a stand against the notion of quickening, and claims that it doesn't represent a proper view of human gestation.

Just one year later after publishing The Relations of the Sexes, Duffey's continued to write about her society with her 1877 book, The Ladies' and Gentleman's Etiquette. In this book she discusses the proper etiquette for 35 different situations any given person may find themselves in. This book, though straightforward in its content, has a sharp introduction where Duffey discusses women should have a higher place in society. --Jperry98 (talk) 03:38, 3 December 2018 (UTC) --Jperry98 (talk) 04:38, 7 December 2018 (UTC) --Jperry98 (talk) 23:31, 7 December 2018 (UTC)

Summation of Work
I uploaded my edits to the article Eliza Bisbee Duffey. I deleted a lot of quotations and rewrote most of the article. I found that the the previous editors used blogs and empty links to write about her. Further investigation of the blogs revealed that the previous editors copied word for word from the illegitimate source! Overall I made the article more legitimate, cleaned it from false or redundant statements, and added more information. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jperry98 (talk • contribs) 07:28, 8 December 2018 (UTC)