User talk:Jrc05680/Kiefer sandbox

Review
Artistic Process Good finds- Cool facts, and interesting insights. No clear need for the quote in the sentence about lead- Consider revising. Consider making information into one cohesive paragraph then cite the source (Wright) only once at the end? PierceJ2020 (talk) 23:08, 14 March 2019 (UTC)

Philosophy Good start to something great! No big complaints here, excited to read when finished and in more essay-like structure. PierceJ2020 (talk) 23:08, 14 March 2019 (UTC)

Personal Life

"Eight Points"

Refrences Consider finding more sources. PierceJ2020 (talk) 23:08, 14 March 2019 (UTC)

Overall Awesome to see new sections being added. Think about where these will fit best in the article. Also, consider adding to or editing pre-existing sections.PierceJ2020 (talk) 23:08, 14 March 2019 (UTC)

Ragan Gish's Peer Review
The page is laid out very nicely. My only suggestion would be that you need more information that doesn't necessary flows together very well yet, but that is to be expected at this point in the project. You all seem to have contributed some decent and reliable records as well. Over all a great start. RaganGish (talk) 22:31, 17 March 2019 (UTC)

Autumn's Peer Review
I liked how you organized the page and its different main topics. Several interesting facts that made this more interesting to read. Keep citing your sources and find out some more information about your artist and add some more details I recommend. I feel like some information flows together also but can easily be fixed and is understandable. Overall, great job so far, I can't wait to read more about your artist. SAutumnUCM (talk) 23:44, 17 March 2019 (UTC)SAutumnUCMSAutumnUCM (talk) 23:44, 17 March 2019 (UTC)

Christina Foster's Peer Review
Look into the quotes you are inserting and determined if they are actually necessary or if they can be paraphrased as there are several uses of quotations. The layout is nice, don't forget an introduction though. Much of the language is very neutral, be careful in the philosophy and artistic process sections as they deal with personal opinions of Kiefer, making sure these aren't stated as facts but as his personal views. I'm not sure what the headline before "artworks" is, so depending on its material, consider switching the order of that and "artworks." Really great start though, very organized and informative. Cmf00690 (talk) 00:09, 18 March 2019 (UTC)