User talk:Jrcarrol/sandbox

As professor Tysick said in the video chat on Tuesday I would maybe consider rewording the first line. Using the phrase United States twice right next to each other seems a bit repetitive. Additionally, I would add the name of the program that you allude to, and if there is an article on that program I would hyperlink it. I checked the sources and I was able to easily access all of them. Also, they seem like they come from reliable, trustworthy sources. The information used is clearly from one of the articles, so there should be a citation in the paragraph after you paraphrase the info, not just at the end of the paragraph(professor Tysick also alluded to this). Lastly, I am not sure why there is a bibliography section and a references section, if I am remembering correctly I believe she said to use one or the other as the title. Overall this seems like a solid entry.Kristenzima (talk) 00:38, 3 December 2020 (UTC)


 * Great work overall here are some changes you may want to consider: I believe last class professor Tysick talked about removing / rewording the first sentence as to not repeat "United States" and providing the name of the specific program. Additionally you only need to include either a bibliography section or references, but not both. All of your reference links worked as intended and your sources seem to be high quality gov't/ scientific studies. Other than that it looks great.Ajpettis (talk) 04:13, 3 December 2020 (UTC)