User talk:Jrnevans2018/sandbox

Peer Review: Cass 11/5
1. This article is really good. The story is easy to follow and is very interesting.

2. One thing I would try to focus on for the next draft/final finished article is proofreading your text. I saw multiple grammatical errors and a bit of colloquial-sounding language that could definitely be improved to make the article sound a bit sharper.

3. I think the most important thing is to fix up the language and to maybe add a few more sources, if you are able to.

4. My article is the Uhuru Movement, and I think there is a huge connection to be made with social movements. Great job overall! I can definitely see how much work went into this.

Cassandradefalco (talk) 00:13, 6 November 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review by Alexis Craighead
Hi!

You did a good job relaying the information you found! However, it reads more like a essay than a wiki article. I would try rewriting some sentences that are more essay format instead of article format. Also, there should not be a conclusion in the article. Maybe try naming it something else that summarizes the section. I also noticed that you only have two sources. It would probably be a good idea to find at least a few more so that your article is more reliable with its information. Overall very cool topic, I learned a lot that I did not know!

Good luck, Alexis — Preceding unsigned comment added by ACraigh (talk • contribs) 02:42, 6 November 2018 (UTC)