User talk:Jsuar99/sandbox

Professor Feedback 3/30/2019 Jose, you have done a good job of working through the Wikipedia modules and commenting on the article first assigned to your group. I want to strongly encourage you to decide what you will do for the article chosen by your group and begin working on the edits. We are past the midpoint of the semester and you will need to have some edits/comments or additions so that the person/group assigned to review your work can offer you constructive feedback. Please talk to me on Tuesday if you have questions or need help. Otherwise, good job and keep making progress. --Dibsmith (talk) 01:55, 31 March 2019 (UTC)Professor Bensonsmith

Student Feedback At the time in which I reviewed your edits, I saw three additional parts:

"Second-wave feminism stemmed from Betty Friedan’s The Feminine Mystique and worked to dismantle sexism relating to the perceived domestic purpose of women. While feminists during this time had success through the Equal Pay Act of 1963, Title IX, and Roe v. Wade, they largely alienated black women from the platforms of the mainstream movement. (https://www.vox.com/2018/3/20/16955588/feminism-waves-explained-first-second-third-fourth) "

"An example of this is Iris Marion Young arguing that differences must be acknowledged in order to find unifying social justice issues that in effect create coalitions that aid in changing society for the better.[Resource4] More specifically, this relates to the ideals of the NCNW."

"Simultaneity is explained as the simultaneous influences of race, class, gender, and sexuality, which informed the members lives and their resistance to oppression."

The first part that you added fulfilled your goal of making the section a little more inclusive and explaining an important stage between first-wave and third-wave feminism. I think it's great that you expanded more on the concept of simultaneity, instead of assuming the reader already understands what it is, especially since it's quite relevant to the subject at hand.

Since you mentioned you would be copyediting, I thought it'd be good if you added a sentence before "The historical exclusion of black women from the feminist movement in the United States resulted in many black 19th and 20th century feminists, such as Anna Julia Cooper, challenging the exclusion" to mention how the historical background section is exclusive to the United States. I think you could also explain a bit more about what the NCNW is (it's used in this sentence: "More specifically, this relates to the ideals of the NCNW").