User talk:Jtmitchell2/sandbox

From YounJi nam
I see that there is already a good amount of writing done by someone else. It probably gave you a little space to step in. I guess that you are focusing on the human part of the evolutionary pressure with very specific examples. I feel it would be better if you can provide a context about your subtopic first before the examples. You can also give a brief summary how the evolutionary pressure is different from other pressure such as abiotic/environmental pressures. Plus, for the first example, you can modify a way that you don't need to cite the same article for many times in a paragraph. Please let me know if you want me to elaborate further.

From Ryan Lavoie
I'm not entirely sure you're supposed to cite one source in every sentence for an entire paragraph, but citations in this class have been done slightly different than what I'm used to. It might be a good idea to add classical cases of artificial selection by humans, or at least mention artificial selection as a topic and link to that page. There are so many different cases of selection by humans you could use that it may be best to use the most well known ones (pigeons, dogs, etc.). If that's not the direction you want to go, adding some kind of summary/intro line before you get into the specific models, explaining that your examples are unintentional selection, would be nice. Oh that and mentioning the names and years of publication of the research in the text itself, just saying "Brown 2013's 30 year study of road kill in cliff swallows..." or something like that. That's mostly just personal preference though. Relavoie (talk) 00:16, 18 November 2017 (UTC)

From Jay Khuti
Tyler, I think that your introductory paragraph on Human Evolutionary Pressures could be a little more succinct, to try and get it closer to sounding like an encyclopedia entry. For example, I think you could combine the first and second sentences and try and try and get right to the point of how humans play the role of intentional and unintentional evolutionary agents. Also, I'm not sure if it's necessary to explain the process of how humans influence speciation rather that just say that we do, because you can just put in hyperlinks for those articles as you need them.

The rest of your entry looks good, and I appreciate how it creates a window for other users to potentially add their example of artificial selection if they so choose.