User talk:Jtumina/sandbox

Underlined parts are my changes.Jtumina (talk) 16:54, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

In the second paragraph of your overview I think you should restructure the sentence "Artificial intelligence, cognitive modelling [modeling], and neural networks are information processing paradigms inspired..." to start with neural networks, so "Neural networks, artificial intelligence, and cognitive modeling..." because the first paragraph talks about neural networks and it has a better flow. Also for the artificial intelligence you should add an internal link, or briefly describe it, so the reader can know what it is about before going into it.

In your first sentence under the History section, "Computer simulation of the branching architecture of the dendritesof pyramidal neurons." 1) put a space between dendrites of 2) I don't understand what this sentence is there for. Maybe add in a brief analysis after the sentence explaining what it means in relation to your topic.

3rd sentence in 1st paragraph of criticism: "in his research presented in the paper [add a comma here] "Knowledge-based Training of Artificial Neural Networks for Autonomous Robot Driving,"'Sanjanamahtani (talk) 17:12, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

I think the sentence "When neural networks have similar properties to the brain, they are able to perform tasks such as pattern recognition, and even when not all neurons are functioning, the network can still function overall." would flow better without the word "even", maybe considering revising to: When neural networks have similar properties to the brain, they are able to perform tasks such as pattern recognition. When some neurons are not working, the network still functions overall.Katem0315 (talk) 17:16, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

I think the sentence "EEE International Conference on Neural Networks (1987) was the first conference with neural networks as the topic. Also in the late 1980s, many journals were founded such as the INNS journal Neural Networks (1988), and Neural Computation (1989).[2]" would be a good place to add links to other Wikipedia page.Katem0315 (talk) 17:18, 28 November 2018 (UTC)