User talk:JuliaOlszewsk19/sandbox

Prof. Neumeier comments
Hi Julia, some specific comments:

--Following the overall evaluation of your peer reviewer (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User_talk:Julia_olszewski/sandbox), maybe add a title at the top (like Astronomy in Islamic Art) of the sandbox page to make it clear this is a new section.

--I think you did a good job including a number of examples, please consider also including the mantle of Roger II, as we discussed, here is a good scholarly resource that explicitly mentions the possible representation of astronomical constellations on the object: http://www.globalmiddleages.org/sites/default/files/Hoffman-Pathways-Portability-Islamic-Christian-Interchange.pdf

--Perhaps delete or make more specific the sentence "Islamic art maintains the capability to reach every class and level of society." It feels to general for the topic at hand.

--You mention Rasa'il as if it were a philosophical term, but that is not quite right. "Rasa'il" in Arabic means "letters" or "encyclopedia" and I think you are referring to a text called the "Encyclopedia of the Brethren of Purity" In fact, in this sentence you can hyperlink to this Wikipedia page on the topic: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Encyclopedia_of_the_Brethren_of_Purity So your sentence should read something like "Within Islamic cosmological doctrines and the Islamic study of astronomy, like in the Encylopedia of the Brethren of Purity (The Rasa'il of the Ikhwan al-Safa), medieval scholars emphasize the great importance of the study of the heavens."

--You use both parantheses for citations and numbered footnotes, just use the footnotes, that is the preferred style for Wikipedia.

--include more details about the ewer in the image caption like date, place of production (look at other examples already on the Wikipedia article)

And a few edits to the text:

--"Umayyad rest and bathhouse" TO "rural Umayyad palace and bath complex"

--"The Ikhwān describes the Sun to have been placed at the center of" TO "In their encyclopedia, the Ikhwan al-Safa describe the sun as the center of"

--"Ewers depicting the twelve zodiac symbols exist in order to emphasize elite craftsmanship and carry blessings." TO "Ewers depicting the twelve zodiac symbols exist in order to emphasize elite craftsmanship and carry blessings, such as one example now at the Metropolitan Museum of Art."

--"in which the coin was minted in" (delete the second in, also maybe give more information about the example of the Mughal coin)

--"and a means of communication of themes" TO "and a means to communicate symbolic meanings or specific information."

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