User talk:Julia 44691/sandbox

Hey Julia!

You have really good content. I would just suggest you find a way to connect the quotes to the larger article. As they are right now, they seem a little out of context. Maybe mark them as "quotes attributed to" or something and be careful of large block quotes (wikipedia has a tendency to erase those). Also, make sure all your information is properly cited. I noticed a few sentences that would need citation, but had none. Like the sentence about the meaning of his tattoos and the last sentence on the perspective of his sons.

Otherwise, this is great! You have some nice sources and your text is clear. I'm excited to see the end result!

Mdladams (talk) 17:02, 2 December 2017 (UTC)

Thank you for the advice!! Julia 44691 (talk) 23:11, 4 December 2017 (UTC)