User talk:Juliacohen15/sandbox

Peer Review-Sarah
Hi Julia! I think you've clearly done extensive research thus far. The section titled "The Beguilded" about her latest film is particularly fascinating, and I appreciate the fact that you've included criticisms of the film as well. I would make sure that when you edit, maybe rephrase some of your sentences to be less wordy, since that's more of the Wikipedia style of writing. At times, this reads a little more academic than a Wikipedia article. Other than that, I think you've done a great job!

Peer Review - Natalie
Your contributions are very in depth and well done! Your exploration of the factors that influenced her filmmaking style really adds a new dimension to looking at her films. Discussing the sexism she has faced in the industry is also a nice touch. I would be careful about that section getting repetitive, however - there are some phrases and ideas repeated a couple of times in there. Overall though, I can't think of too much else to add! These are very strong additions to the page! — Preceding unsigned comment added by NSandmann (talk • contribs) 23:08, 29 March 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review -- Christine Crais
This is fantastic work. I think you have done extensive research on many different elements of her work and life. I like the way you address her experience with sexism within the industry in a neutral and encyclopedic manner (which I know is hard to do). I think it would be very interesting to find more information on her family history -- I am sure that her talents are discredited in many ways due to her family's history with filmmaking. I love the part about The Beguiled in relation to feminism versus female perspective. It would be good to elaborate on that a bit more!

Peer Review Sami Feller
I think this a great start to your Wikipedia article. Your research is very in depth and thorough and it appears to have an overall encyclopedic tone. I liked how you discussed the sexism that she has faced in her professional career, and also how you provided detail on feminism versus female perspective. The only thing I think you could possibly provide more information on to add to your overall article would be family history and background. Cecrais (talk) 20:07, 30 March 2018 (UTC)

Professor Schreiber feedback
Julia - This is terrific work. It is obvious that you have done a lot of research here so make sure that you appropriately cite ALL of your sources before adding this to the site.MJSProf (talk) 18:03, 15 April 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review Response
A loved reading all the feedback on the work I had done on the article. I payed special attention to Sarah's comment about Wikipedia-style writing and have since gone back and edited my sentence structure and shortened and tightened the paragraphs. I have also gone through and tried to eliminate some of the repetitiveness as Natalie suggested. After I did this draft, I did more research on Coppola's family background and her struggles relating to coming from a famous family as Christine suggested. As I have been working on the final article, I have been incorporating formal citations as well. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Juliacohen15 (talk • contribs) 17:29, 16 April 2018 (UTC)