User talk:Juliapharmer/sandbox

This sandbox looks great - I am from Cleveland so I think it's great to add more to the East Cleveland, Ohio Wiki page. I saw that on the original East Cleveland, Ohio Wiki page, there is a section about "Education" which you could add additional information to. I saw that you already included parts about levels of education, which is good. I know that there is a ton of information about CLEVENET libraries online, because the Cleveland library system is absolutely huge, so that could be interesting (clevnet.org/libraries). I am glad you added a section about medical care - perhaps look into how the Cleveland Clinic or University Hospitals (UH) treats members of the East Cleveland community? There might be stats out there about that. Good job!

-Beatrice

I agree also to add more context to the statistics. I would also recommend that maybe add literacy rates to Education and also compare them to national averages, perhaps also, add test scores compare to national averages, or even Ohio averages. You could also add poverty statistics about the city and compare them to the national average, or even just Cleveland. Overall, this is very good start to the topic, and is very interesting. (Madeleine Lane).

I agree with the points made below. The statistics could use some context. Also, nice suggestion by Wade about the schools. I assume you're planning to insert this into the Wikipedia page on East Cleveland. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/East_Cleveland,_Ohio. I like the section about the merger. You might elaborate even more about city mergers; maybe even find some research on whether mergers work or not, and the strengths and weaknesses of mergers. Overall, this is a solid first draft. Mcassell04 (talk) 02:10, 13 October 2017 (UTC)

Very good, put together information! But I think the medical care section could use a little more. Jbracale (talk) 02:26, 11 October 2017 (UTC)

This article is really well put together, but the statistics in your Income, Business, Education, and Households sections could use some context. Comparing the stats you use with city (Cleveland), state, or national averages could help give a clearer picture of what they really say. An example of this done well is your Walkability section where you compare the score to the City of Cleveland's score. With that said you could also mention how Walk Smart calculates their score. Additionally, statistics on the percent of racial or ethnic minority citizens residing in East Cleveland would be an interesting and relevant addition to your demographics section. This statistc would also give context to the percentage of minority businesses owned by minorities. Good job, this was a really interesting read! Also for comparing economic stats to national averages I recommend bls.gov. Jdicke16 (talk) 18:53, 11 October 2017 (UTC)Jacob DickeyJdicke16 [User talk:Jdicke16|talk]]) 18:53, 11 October 2017 (UTC)

The article is organized in a very digestible fashion for the reader. However multiple areas of the article could use more work such as the education and medical care sections. In the education section you could talk about the local schools in the area their graduation rates, financial state, etc. The section discussing the merger with Cleveland is well written and provides a lot of detail but could use some additional editing for grammar and sentence structure. Other sections could include more details but otherwise looks to be a good article in the making.Wade Elmore (talk) 00:37, 13 October 2017 (UTC)

I like how you guys picked a unique and very specific topic of East Cleveland and their statistics. It was interesting to see the population and numbers involved on a part of Cleveland we do not get to hear about a lot. I think it would be really interesting to include more details on the people of the statistics. Specific characteristics like ethnicity, income, and age. I believe this would be more beneficial to someone who wanted to do more research on the topic. It would also be quite interesting to see what type of businesses generate the most income for the city and smaller areas apart of East Cleveland. The whole page is very well written and informative for the public. The percentages and research come from reliable sources and I think that is very important. Well done! Kwhite86 (talk) 03:05, 13 October 2017 (UTC)Katie White

This article was very well put together. It carries a lot of statistics that are creditable. This article could be very beneficial for a reader to educate themselves on East Cleveland's demographics. There are some multiple areas within the article that could use some more detail. In the education area you could talk about percentages in the graduation rate for higher education. Does the education system lack government funding? For the housing Section of the article, you could talk about what the average foreclose rate for the area is and what is the housing market status for East Cleveland. The merger section of this article is very detailed and full of information. Make sure to check over your work for minor grammatical errors and sentence structures. Overall this is a very good article. --Bgreen29 (talk) 05:15, 13 October 2017 (UTC)

I also agree with all the points that have previously stated before me.I really like the structure of your article. I felt like after reading i was able to get a better understanding of the East Cleveland Ohio area. You were able to provide information about income, businesses, education, and various other aspects that most people wouldn't even know about their own city. However I have a couple suggestions that i would like to add. If you were to add some extra information, i would recommend talking more about origin of East Cleveland, prominent figures from East Cleveland, or historical landmarks in East Cleveland. The more detail you provide the better. A site where you could visit to find more information about East Cleveland is http://www.eastcleveland.org/about/. After viewing this site i think you will be able to add more information to your article. Reggiedublin5 (talk) 20:03, 13 October 2017 (UTC)

This was an interesting article to read. I did not previously know that East Cleveland was separate from Cleveland. You provided a lot of good context that helped me see how Cleveland and East Cleveland were different. In your section about the census, you gave a link to the US Census Bureau page itself. This helps the reader go take a look at the numbers in context. You might want to think about doing the same thing in the income section. I didn't fully understand the segments on transportation and medical care. It might help to better explain how they fit into the context of political economics. Ksugseed (talk) 21:02, 13 October 2017 (UTC)