User talk:JulieEng2000/sandbox

Article Editing Suggestions
Dark Lord (fiction) 1. Be consistent with capitalizing certain words and stay more objective Examples: Do not rank characters without references Stay away from words like: tend, sometimes, etc.


 * Approved! Josef Horáček (talk) 20:18, 7 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Most of your edits were very good, but this sentences still needs help: "Jadis, the White Witch of Narnia is another example, who casts the world into an eternal winter but never Christmas." At the very least, the punctuation should be changed as follows: "Jadis, The Which Witch of Narnia, is another example. She casts the world into an eternal winter but never Christmas." Josef Horáček (talk) 17:47, 17 February 2015 (UTC)

Article to Cite
Tsunami Children Foundation — Preceding unsigned comment added by JulieEng2000 (talk • contribs) 05:11, 7 February 2015 (UTC)
 * This article does need a lot of help. My two concerns is that it may be too short and that there may not be enough secondary sources to use. You can do some preliminary research and see what you can find about the organization. Even if you do find enough sources (you need at least four), you may have to do a good bit of writing to work the sources in. Alternatively, you can search for a different article to work on.Josef Horáček (talk) 20:25, 7 February 2015 (UTC)
 * One thing that you should do is delete the mission statement from the article. It's promotional in nature and doesn't belong on WP. Josef Horáček (talk) 20:25, 7 February 2015 (UTC)

Color blindness
 * Good choice. Josef Horáček (talk) 18:28, 10 February 2015 (UTC)

Color Blindness Sources
http://libezp.lib.lsu.edu/login?url=http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=a9h&AN=9720503&site=ehost-live&scope=site[edit] http://libezp.lib.lsu.edu/login?url=http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=a9h&AN=29544246&site=ehost-live&scope=site[edit] http://libezp.lib.lsu.edu/login?url=http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=a9h&AN=44515430&site=ehost-live&scope=site[edit] http://libezp.lib.lsu.edu/login?url=http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=a9h&AN=99379596&site=ehost-live&scope=site[edit]
 * Unfortunately, I'm not able to see these links. Josef Horáček (talk) 00:36, 17 February 2015 (UTC)

Lead Section Assignment
Planning — Preceding unsigned comment added by JulieEng2000 (talk • contribs) 13:48, 19 February 2015 (UTC)

Analysis
The order would make more sense if the planning process section was the first category. The planning process section should also have more length in comparison with the other sections in the article. Also, some parts in the planning in public policy might be better in the planning process section. — Preceding unsigned comment added by JulieEng2000 (talk • contribs) 03:59, 23 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Not an easy topic to write about, but go ahead. Your draft is going in the right direction. I think you should swap the order of the sentences in the second paragraph. First you introduce forecasting ("An important...") and then you show how it connects to planning ("Planning combines..."). Make sure the internal link appears the first time the word "forecasting is used." Also, "preparation" should be lower-case. Another question: are their any specific fields that study planning (philosophy, management, political science)? Josef Horáček (talk) 19:21, 1 March 2015 (UTC)