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I think this article is properly referenced, however the author makes statements that leave me wondering if the information should be referenced or if it was common knowledge. This article is neutral and does not appear to be heavily biased towards a particular position. It includes lots of fact based evidence and examples and I also believe that everything in this article is relevant to the topic. Viewpoints from outside of North America have been limited to only Germany and of the citations I have looked into, the citation links do work. Overall, the articles appeared to be neutral however the few that did appear to have a bit of bias has left me, as the reader, feeling that racial profiling is wrong (bias not noted). I did not come across any plagiarism issues however there was one attempt that paraphrasing that was very close to its original source. The information is not out of date however, in my opinion, this article could be improved by including facts/information about additional countries other than Canada, USA, Mexico and Germany. I would also suggest that the author be aware of the language they are using (ie: “Racial profiling is frowned upon in some societies"). It is important to remember to avoid using slang as not everybody is going to understand or comprehend it in the manner the author intended - grammar is very important! I also walk away from this article wondering if the definition given of racial profiling has been concluded by opinion or by exhausting resources. — Preceding unsigned comment added by July.love30 (talk • contribs) 17:32, 12 February 2015 (UTC)