User talk:Juspeck006/sandbox

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 * Points: 2
 * Grade: C

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Meets Expectations This edit is a little dry. It reads almost like just a list of facts, rather than a smooth explanation.

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Nearly Meets Expectations There isn't a clear purpose for this paragraph, other than listing roadways in Verona.

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Nearly Meets Expectations With little information about how this connects to Verona as a city, its sort of lacking.

11/4/2018 Evaluation by User:Meganly
Grade: A/B

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Exceeds Expectations This seems like a clean and thorough edit, grammatically.

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Exceeds Expectations You articulate what you are talking about in a clear and concise manner. Paragraphs are structurally sound and informative and seem to come from a neutral stance.

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Exceeds Expectations Your efforts in attempting this subject in a neutral and informative style is impressive, especially considering the timeliness on the financial sector. That could not have been easy.

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Evaluation

 * Points: 4
 * Grade: A

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Meets Expectations A few sentences could use some re-wording or be combined just to flow better

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Exceeds Expectations Excellent information

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Exceeds Expectations This seems like a clean and thorough edit, grammatically, for a rough draft. A couple grammatical errors I found were in the last paragraph, "inclue noise and air polution" (d needed in "include" and 2 L's in pollution). Also, I am not familiar with the word, "extranalities" and it looks like spell check isn't either. I know with some subject matter, these new terms pop up, so that is why I am hesitant in critiquing your use. I wonder if you meant, "externality" (but see how spell check doesn't like that either)?

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Exceeds Expectations You inform your audience in a neutral, non biased tone.

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Exceeds Expectations I thought the way in which you formed the outline of this edit was clear, concise, and helpful in understanding the points you would be making in this edit. You articulate what you are talking about in a clear and concise manner. Paragraphs are structurally sound and informative. *I would consider reworking or expounding on the second paragraph which discusses "Terminology" used to distinguish individuals from different ethnic backgrounds. "Terminology" is capitalized, which informs the reader of its importance, so I had hoped to hear more about what that terminology is or looks like in the context of these immigrants. Or perhaps you can link it to a Wiki that discusses this terminology? The follow up information isn't clear in its relationship to the Terminology, in my opinion.

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Exceeds Expectations I thought that your use of the information that we have learned over the course of this term and then applied to this assignment was smart and made for a fascinating and informative read.

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Exceeds Expectations You have the required amount of content for this assignment. It is executed well and informative.

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Evaluation

 * Points: 37
 * Grade: C

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Meets Expectations Since its the final edit, I think I have to get picky with things cause overall its really good. In the first paragraph there should be an "a" before diverse ethnic background, and then possibly "of Turkish descent" rather than background. A few things are missing capitals on title of stuff.

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Meets Expectations Possibly move the statistic in the first section to their own section titled statistics and throw some other ones in there?

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Almost meets Expectations It needs its own sandbox page. With the old posts on there it makes it a little confusing. Especially with the sources and the contents page at the top.

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Almost meets Expectations I feel like there could be more information. I know you dont have all your sources up yet though.

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