User talk:Jwiechjacob/sandboxdraft

Peer review:
 * Repeated text in both history and creation section
 * Check grammatical flow
 * Maybe link key words (like the people mentioned) to existing wiki pages if possible- allows readers to find more info about referred topics
 * Liking the bullet points- straightforward, clear, visual aid
 * Characteristics section: 'good' or 'bad' qualities according to who's/what standards? Clarify
 * Try not to include the wiki page as a citation...you'll eventually be citing yourself. Maybe use the textbook as a reference?

Overall great improvements to the existing article!Emaria2222 (talk) 02:52, 14 April 2019 (UTC)


 * Thanks for your suggestions, Emaria2222, and perhaps you can clarify some of the examples of repetition and grammatical errors you noticed so that Jwiechjacob has a better idea of what direction to go in? Jacob, these suggestions are great places to start improving the great work you've done so far on your article. Proofread and make sure everything is clear and straightforward. You've already done a lot with the creation of new sections, so going forward try to find even more citations and bibliographic sources so that you can beef up the credibility since you only have one strong source in your draft (it's true that you don't want Wikipedia pages as citations). In the next few days do a deep dive into the history of the culture hero and its concept in mythology, and really work on getting this page to the highest standard. Keep up the hard work! Gardneca (talk) 07:43, 17 April 2019 (UTC)


 * Clarification on grammatical flow- ie: run-on sentence in the last sentence of first paragraph, commas needed in last sentence in characteristics section, and "Such as the ability to transform from human to fish or bird." sounds like an incomplete thought(Characteristics section). A suggestion is to read your work aloud to check for awkward sounding sentences.Emaria2222 (talk) 00:49, 18 April 2019 (UTC)