User talk:Jwo1125/sandbox

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I really appreciate that you were very clear about how, why, and where you are suggesting the edits. This makes it much easier to assess.

Working to make an article that is largely based upon a marketing perspective more balanced definitely is going to take work and I appreciate your attempt to make the tone more neutral. Interestingly, you might consider what it means to "push boys and girls to identity with certain gender roles." In the context of background for the article, I think the intent of the original version is merely to state that the purpose of gender norming is to create exclusionary practices. This is not seen as negative by those who believe in binary gender roles. In this sense, using the word "push" might be seen as more loaded. So how to write in a balanced way that considers a multitude of perspectives on gender roles? What is you did something more like:

Games given a gender role generally serve to support a culture's gender exclusive or segregationist practices.

And then add a source that supports that claim. As one of the comments in the talk page points out, using more scholarly sources and few popular culture sources would help. Jbdolphin (talk) 07:22, 16 December 2020 (UTC)