User talk:Jxxl/sandbox

Payne_P3PR
-The tone in the added sections is great; it's neutral, appropriate, and balanced.

-Consider adding links for some of things you mention: bathyscaphe, Deep Sea Challenger, and anthropogenic are pages on Wikipedia. Maybe HROV Nereus too?

-Maybe add some info about discoveries that Piccard, Walsh and Cameron made in the trench, what was significant about their journeys?

-Sources come from good organizations (like Woods Hole), but original publications would be stronger, instead of news articles (though I don't even know if that would exist, so its probably fine!)

-Images of the subversives or explorers would add interest.

TheRedHusky (talk) 18:35, 30 March 2018 (UTC)

Dwyer_PeerReview
Exploration Section -	Make a link to “atmospheres” measurement of unit page -	Seems like the information doesn’t flow -	Bathyscape? Is there a link to see what this means? -	“reach 7,000 meters deep” could be rephrased. Doesn’t read very well. -	What depth did the Japanese Shinkai reach? -	“thought to?” maybe estimated? Anthropogenic Litter -Isn’t all litter anthropogenic?

Organization: I believe you’re following more of a timeline approach for the actual explorations, which was a good decision. The first paragraph of the exploration section seems slightly disjointed. I think the information could perhaps be condensed in a more readable way. Content: Felt relevant and useful. More links could be helpful. Perhaps links to “submersibles” or to any of the exploration submersibles like the “Shinkai” could be beneficial. Tone: Strong. No judgmental or imbalanced language. Citations: All information links directly to completed citations, all used equally. I think the actual sources you used were strong as well. Though news sources were used, they were from "established outlets," which Wikipedia allows. Completeness: Feels complete for the most part. The litter section could perhaps have slightly more information added to it explaining how this litter was recovered, or what the implications of this finding are. Gaps: Filled the gaps of the page, and also added a totally new and relevant section. Images: Are there any images of exploration missiles or crews that could be added? NUBioStudent (talk) 14:58, 5 April 2018 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by NUBioStudent (talk • contribs) 19:09, 30 March 2018 (UTC)