User talk:KBrill11/sandbox

Peer Review
— Preceding unsigned comment added by Xo Fried Lobster (talk • contribs) 22:59, 28 November 2018 (UTC)
 * 1) "to characterize a somewhat recently established cluster of architectural approaches, particularly in Europe"- The use of the term "somewhat" is a little confusing, might be better to include a historical context for this? The link for the second citation also does not work.
 * 2) "Well received by modernist architects the use of beton brut was popularized leading to the creation of the brutalist architecture style which thrived in the 1950s-1970's."- Is there a source for this?
 * 3) "Brutalism was a design philosophy, not a style."- This sounds more like a critique rather than a neutral fact about the topic.
 * 4) "Wood-imprinted concrete is still very popular in landscaping especially in some of the western European countries."- There was no mention of what "wood-imprinted concrete" is before this was introduced.
 * 5) Is Béton brut a material? From the history part it sounded more like an idea while the fabrication part makes it clear that it's a material, might be better to clarify the definition more in the beginning of the article.
 * 6) Are the images credited?

Instructor comments
This is a significant expansion of this article, and I like that you're experimenting with different features such as the gallery. Your peer reviewer has made some very good points, especially the one about clarifying whether béton brut is considered a material, a mode of architectural expression, or something else (assuming there's general agreement about this, or stating as much if there's not). I don't think it's necessary to credit images linked to Commons uploads, though. A few other suggestions: Elizabeth Linden Rahway (talk) 11:11, 5 December 2018 (UTC)
 * Where there are multiple terms meaning the same thing, all of the alternative terms could be listed at the first instance (e.g., board forming, board shuttering, wood-imprinted, etc.), but then one preferred term should be used consistently after that.
 * Consider reordering the sentences of the Fabrication section to walk the reader from more general to more specific.
 * Wikilink to the formwork article.
 * Debug the citation templates.