User talk:KJCross/Marion Konwanénhon Delaronde/Loulii Peer Review

Hi Kiana,

Lead

I think your topic is really interesting. I think you need to add to your lead a bit more so it can cover the aspects of your article body. Your lead is doesn't include the "books" that are written in the body.

Content

Your information are from recent articles, so this good. I saw that you added a youtube interview. If you can add more information from interviews, that would help you gain more information on her personal life. Your content is well written, you adapt a neutral tone while writing.

Sources and References

I think your sources are credible and current. You accurately reflected on what the sources say. If there is any other sources that touches upon other aspects of her life, I think you should include that. I think that all the sources you added are the sources available on online which is good. I checked your links and they work perfectly.

Organization

Your content is definitely clear and easy to read. For the spelling you can make sure that all your words are correctly spelled by putting it in a docs and check if there are any. Also, make sure that the words you use multiple times are written the same way. For example, you wrote kahnawake the first time and the second time you wrote Kahnawà:ke.

Images and Media

The images are accurate and by showing the puppets I can understand directly the work she does which is good. It grasps my attention first, which gives us a direct context of what she does and who she is.

New article

The article follows the the patterns of other similar articles which is really good and coherent. You used more than three reliable secondary sources which is good and shows credibility. Overall, I believe the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements.

Overall Impressions

Overall, I think your article is well structured and covers important information of her life. Your pictures enhance the page and makes it more interesting to read. I can tell that you are familiar with Wikipedia and your writing is very well-structured and professional.