User talk:KalebThome/sandbox

What does the article (or section) do well? I think the section on the audience’s reaction and understanding of the music is really interesting. Overall, very in depth on the sections included.

What changes would you suggest overall? I think adding a section on Afrobeat is very important. I got this from the Afrobeat wiki page: “ Politics are essential to Afrobeat, since founder Kuti used social criticism to pave the way for social change. His message can be described as confrontational and controversial, which can be related to the political climate of most of the African countries in the 1970s, many of which were dealing with political injustice and military corruption while recovering from the transition from colonial governments to self-determination”. Also, eventually adding pictures could be good to see different artists. Not sure if this relates, but you could also add something on Live Aid, the benefit concert in 1985 to raise money for the Ethiopian famine. Finally, are there any current artists using music to protest the political climate in the US today?

What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution? I think tying the different genres together with a historical section to make the article cohesive would be important. There also seems to be a heavy focus on US/ European artists, so I think adding some artists/genres from different countries is essential. SBrady16 (talk) 14:16, 21 October 2020 (UTC)

The article does a good job of introducing the topic of music and politics. I think expanding the section about rock is a good idea. The previous author (or you) does a good job of introducing a lot of artists who used their music as a means for political messages, however, it does not covey what these artists were trying to achieve. You need to include the political intent of these artist i.e. why were they protesting and what was it about? You could include some case studies examining the lyrics/melodies of some songs to show the reader what exactly their goals were in producing political rock music. Organisationally I would suggest putting the Rock section after the 1960s-70s Counterculture because it currently includes the sentence, "rock musicians can be traced back to the 1960s counterculture," so it would be good to introduce this idea of counterculture first before examining the Rock genres connection to it. Suzanne bring up a good point that the article is very Western focused. You could either just make a note of that or try to include artists from other countries. Clairedel1 (talk) 14:37, 25 October 2020 (UTC)