User talk:Kalinamajercak/sandbox

All: This is really solid, well-written and well researched. Also, happens to map really well with the coming classes this week and next. I have individual feedback below. Note that the article lead may need editing to reflect your contributions. Also, I'm wondering about the reorganization and what the whole will look like as you integrate. I agree with your reviewers's comments, and add mine to them.

AfAm Women (Omi) First off, really want to honor the incredible work you've put into this. This feels really polished and lucid, and the tone feels adequately neutral. Your sources and research are very good. I wonder if some sub-headings might help -- it is organized chronologically, but different things happened in different eras, perhaps we can put a name to them? For example, "Early Eugenics Movement in the US [dates x-x]"?, "Opposition and Civil Rights Era", "Investigation/Media Attention"?-- these are very rudimentary examples, I'm sure you can come up with something you like better than these...
 * I'm not sure what's going on with citation #1 and that hyperlink in it
 * source #11 may benefit from the link? https://link.gale.com/apps/doc/A568118613/LT?u=gtown_law&sid=LT&xid=de74f84d is this appropriate even though it may need a login to work?
 * there may be an issue with citation #12

Latina Women (Morgan) I agree with Esther that some more hyperlinks would be useful. As well, I recommend some sub-headings to organize it in a more visual/accessible way. Maybe simply by geographic location, which is how you've organized it anyway.

Native Women (Kalina) --T. Danylevich (talk) 02:21, 15 April 2020 (UTC)
 * definitely link to this https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Indian_Health_Service when you talk about it, and see if there are other areas you could hyperlink
 * I think some of your journal sources are actually open access (Women's History Review) so links would be appropriate; and DOI (digital object identifier) link would be appropriate as well. Also, wondering if the multiple citations you have going at the end of some sentences is OK? (paging on these sources questions)

Irene's peer review In regards to content, I couldn't find anything particularly problematic, seeing as the intention of the sections are to provide history and context! I do however think that what could benefit is the dividing up of Omi's part into sub-sections just to help with the overall flow. Content-wise I think all of the sections have done a good job about going through the history of the individual topics. I wonder if it would be beneficial however to include current discourse that exists amongst academics and advocates regarding each of the topics. The content of all three parts seem heavily centered around legislative and activism history, but not necessarily present day developments?Iyaec39 (talk) 15:37, 10 April 2020 (UTC)

Esther's Peer Review

Lead
 * Specified in the google doc that you are reordering the article but focusing on new content for the Compulsory sterilization section. The three subsections definitely seem like great additions to this article and fit in smoothly with the overall content. Since it’s within the section it’s clear.

Content * Content is really good and fact-based * I like that you provide information from the 1900s through present day; this makes the section feel very complete and informative * It’s great that you included a strong block quote and it varies the formatting to keep things interesting * Consider hyperlinking ‘Latinx’ to the wiki page on it the first time you use it as some people may not be familiar with the term and want clarity * Great job hyperlinking events/firms for further reading
 * Content is strong overall
 * Two of the sections you added focus exclusively on women. Is this because men within these groups were not sterilized? Perhaps worth noting why men aren’t included for complete clarity.
 * For the subsection ‘The Sterilization of Latina Women’

Tone and Balance * Overall this is very strong and the content is neutral * You add a very comprehensive overview of this with good detail and strong statistics—> the stats do a great job of supporting all your points
 * You choose to focus on 3 subgroups, which makes sense as you provide evidence that they were common victims of compulsory sterilization
 * Content is neutral, clear, and fact-based
 * For the subsection ‘The Sterilization of Latina Women’

Sources and References * Consider adding citations in the last paragraph; this would be especially helpful for the very end where you connect it to the current-day reproductive justice movement, which is a great ending to bring it to the present day * Sources are from a variety of dates, which makes sense since you cover the 20th and 21st centuries, but plenty are recent * Sources seem strong and impartial
 * Overall the sources look good and diverse
 * It seems to me that citations 15 and 16 are the same and 17 and 18 are the same so you could just use one for each and cite it multiple times as you do with other citations
 * For the subsection ‘The Sterilization of Latina Women’

Organization * I like how you write this chronologically; it reads nicely and is very comprehensive
 * Organization is good overall and it works well to separate the three subsections the group chose
 * The writing is clear and easy to read and fits with Wiki’s guides for writing
 * For the subsection ‘The Sterilization of Latina Women’

Overall
 * Overall, this is great! The writing is clear, concise, and comprehensive. You give a strong, informative overview of these topics while referencing strong specific evidence. I don’t think you need to do much for this to be 100% finalized — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ecl67 (talk • contribs) 23:15, 13 April 2020 (UTC)

Iqra's Peer Review for Kalina
Content Informative yet concise information about sterilization of Native American women. I loved reading about it and definitely learned a lot of things I did not already know. A suggestion I would make is to add more information about specific tribes and maybe identify some of the scholars or activists who have worked towards addressing the problem as I am sure there are a few names that are prominent.

Organization The information is very well organized and follows a chronological pattern that states the problem, addresses it, and provides the solutions/ actions that took place. Very well done, the information flows nicely.

Sources and Reference You use a few sources that are referenced in many places. Maybe try to find more sources that could confirm what you have written and use those as well. If that is not possible, these sources suffice as well and because you do reference them greatly and give credit, it's all good.

Overall This was a great wiki entry and I had a great time reading it as well. It is easy to read, yet very informative. I gave a few suggestions but overall the work is very well done.